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Phil Rose
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Forum Poets United

Post by Phil Rose »

I thought it would be a great idea if we all wrote a poem together as a forum
The idea is we each post 2 lines of poetry and get as many of the forums poets to add to the poem
Lets see what we can come up with
heres my 2 lines to start;

Tea, Toast and Tears for breakfast
The tea and toast you have to pay for, the tears come free
Critic2
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Re: Forum Poets United

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Phil Rose wrote:I thought it would be a great idea if we all wrote a poem together as a forum
The idea is we each post 2 lines of poetry and get as many of the forums poets to add to the poem
Lets see what we can come up with
heres my 2 lines to start;

Tea, Toast and Tears for breakfast
The tea and toast you have to pay for, the tears come free
great idea, Phil. I'm sorry that my addition is typically subversive but also I'm not sorry at all. this could be such an easy pap game to follow each other with predictable couplets, let's give it some thought and make it develop weirdly instead!


Tea, Toast and Tears for breakfast

The tea and toast you have to pay for, the tears come free

They are rips in my heart

As you said you must come free
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Post by Critic2 »

ok, here's 2 alternatives, maybe someone will run with one of them

Tea, Toast and Tears for breakfast

The tea and toast you have to pay for, the tears come free

but fuck the tea and toast

What a liberty

(delicious play with "free" and "liberty" and the cockney repsonse "what a liberty" which means "wot a bleedin' cheek") (notes for our American cousins who may not speak cockney)




Tea, Toast and Tears for breakfast

The tea and toast you have to pay for, the tears come free

The toast is wet

The tea diluted

just a set-up for the next geezer, not much art in itself.
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Kush
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Post by Kush »

Marie Antoinette said
If they can't have toast
Let them have tears
Or something like that.

or alternately


Marie Antoinette said if they can't have toast
Let them have tears or something like that.

(as per instructions)
Last edited by Kush on Wed Mar 02, 2005 11:30 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by Critic2 »

Kush wrote:Marie Antoinette said
If they can't have toast
Let them have tears
Or something like that.
Kush, you are a webel! you are meant to add 2 more lines to the last two, goddit?
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Post by paints »

My dear boy,
I'm so very very proud of you! To admit that your posts are indeed not meant to help, improve, guide, assist or educate but to subvert is a marvelous breakthrough!
Oh, I'm so happy I'm off for a pint to celebrate!
Sound advice to all aspiring poets:
"Just experiment!" Critic2
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"Maybe it will work, maybe it won't." Critic2
Wow.
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