Office Hooks

[Myra]

You must
be careful

how you hang your coat.
Someone may notice the way
it drapes over mine.

[Violet]

Hi Myra,

I read this a number of times and like it... like how the first part shifts in the first line of the second... I'm noticing too the title change, which might be an improvement (from Paranoid) since it allows for such a reading, as well as other readings... To me it's not about being paranoid, as the poem seems to imply some hidden desire maybe...

v i o l e t

[piñata heart]

Hi Myra,

I really enjoyed this as well. It's like a whisper in the ear. I can practically smell her breath (in my case, it would be a her). Nicely done.

I’ve written in this style quite a lot, but was afraid to submit it out of fear that it wasn’t lengthy enough. You’ve inspired me to possibly post some of that work. Thank you.

Warmly,

-ph

[imaginary friend]

Hi Myra,

I like how the poem reveals a considerable amount of information in five succinct lines.

The image of the coats hanging is very effective.

Nice work!

[Manna]

This may be the best shorty I've read on this forum.

[lizzytysh]

I've got to throw my support for this poem, as well, agreeing with everyone. I missed its pre-change title. I love how it expresses the way we sometimes actually do connect with each other in the subtlest of ways by intention. All kinds of visions and possibilities come flooding into those lines.


~ Lizzy

[Myra]

Thanks for reading Violet. I'm happy I changed the title it was to limiting.

Hi Ph, I'm pleased you heard a whisper. I'm looking forward to reading some of your shorts.

I'm glad the image was effective for you I.F., that pleases me a great deal - thank you.

This may be the best shorty I've read on this forum.

Hey you, I'm much taller then I seem!

Thank you Manna.

I missed its pre-change title. I love how it expresses the way we sometimes actually do connect with each other in the subtlest of ways by intention.

Communication is an interesting thing isn't it Lizzy, funny how much weight we place on words.
Thanks for your comments, the previous title was paranoid, but that was to telling.


edited as I kept saying glad, glad, glad, like some kind of subliminal marketing ploy for bin liners.