Couple in a Restaurant

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fishfishquaileye
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Re: Couple in a Restaurant

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Cate wrote:Hello Fish

I'm going to critique your critique

First - The red socks must go. They clash completely with your green trousers.

second - I NEED YOU TO START YELLING? It really turns me on when people YELL!!! Is your cap stuck?why dont you take it off and doff it to me as a sign of enduring respect

Third - I think that Jimmy's poem is mush

Cate, thanks for your fashion advice and I am sure you have inspired Jimmy by describing his poem as "mush".
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okay, I feel like I'm being misquoted here

it's not just the red socks, it's the red socks with sandals and the rolled green carpris - if you wore some solid black dress socks you'd be fine
second - you said you would never mention my AC/DC heavy metal fetish, that, was told to you in CONFIDENCE
third - I certainly did not say that
Glad it was only a mild earthquake Cate... isn't it really unusual to have earthquakes on the east side of Canada? Quebec had one today as well.
It really was small especially compared to some of the quakes you guys have, our was about 10 minutes after Quebec's.

you have made an excellent point about earthquakes being rare here I.F.
Earthquakes are extremely rare here, Mme. Fish starts screaming and slamming down her vowels and what happens - an earthquake. case proven
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Jimmy, I once read a poem about a man (I think he was at a bed and breakfast) watching a younger couple eat their meal. I've been trying to remember enough of it to find it on google but it's possible it was somebodies individual poem. What struck me was that he seemed to be able to see himself in the younger couple as if he were watching himself but did not seem dissatisfied with his own dinning experience.

For me the silence and tight wrapping of the utensils makes me feel uncomfortable the water seems to break this but only momentarily.
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I think this is more accomplished than '40 Love'.
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Jimmy, Do you know about http://www.writeoutloud.net?
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Thanks Jonnie for the commendation and the webside... will peruse... looks interesting
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of the word being made into flesh
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