I really like Rejected Poem, and Poem #21 upon a first too-brief glance! I have always wished for a sense of humor in my poetry, but I've never been able to grasp one. Perhaps I take myself far too seriously. Hats off, Critic2!
Sincerely,
Hillary
By Popular Demand- The 9 comp. poems submitted by Critic2.
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Medusafern
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Clever little efforts are his/her limits.
I see no depth of matter here, no measure of self, no world weary struggle, no philosophical musings. There appears to be nothing more than Readers Digest fluff. A rather soulless collection all in all.
One hopes there is a light in there somewhere for the authors well being.
I see no depth of matter here, no measure of self, no world weary struggle, no philosophical musings. There appears to be nothing more than Readers Digest fluff. A rather soulless collection all in all.
One hopes there is a light in there somewhere for the authors well being.
Hi there latest Baby Troll, I was always think the creative limit of your owner is thinking up the new names for you and your siblings. I quite liked "Sirius" as it allowed for my excellent John McEnroe joke, but "paints" only suggest that your owner is too stupid to have gone for "pants". I also quite liked the Glory Hog and Avalon trolls.
I think I have the message by now that you are angry and hurting. But could you not express this with some creativity, write a poem for example. Instead your endless dull trolling just makes you appear an irredeemable saddo and tosser. Mind you, that's fair enough as you obviously really are an irredeemable saddo and tosser.
Maybe you should create a new identity, hang around, contribute views on other subjects and then, when your envy becomes too much, write one of your formula troll posts. This is the ydf approach where a poster has no talent of his own but contributes to the general gaiety of the forum. That way there would then be at least an outside chance that one mad person could be fooled for one second that you were a real person with real views.
So, having devoted 5 minutes of my incredibly expensive time to a creature as hopeless as you, I expect at least a thank-you before you disappear in the same junk bin as your predecessors,
Love and Kisses
Critic2
I think I have the message by now that you are angry and hurting. But could you not express this with some creativity, write a poem for example. Instead your endless dull trolling just makes you appear an irredeemable saddo and tosser. Mind you, that's fair enough as you obviously really are an irredeemable saddo and tosser.
Maybe you should create a new identity, hang around, contribute views on other subjects and then, when your envy becomes too much, write one of your formula troll posts. This is the ydf approach where a poster has no talent of his own but contributes to the general gaiety of the forum. That way there would then be at least an outside chance that one mad person could be fooled for one second that you were a real person with real views.
So, having devoted 5 minutes of my incredibly expensive time to a creature as hopeless as you, I expect at least a thank-you before you disappear in the same junk bin as your predecessors,
Love and Kisses
Critic2
I will take it from your rant that constructive criticism is not what you are looking for. Perhaps I should have just said "WOW!".
That's a terribly defensive position you've adopted. It's about the writing, which you do well, but there's really not much meat to it.
I would have thought a bit of maturity would be appropriate and that you might be willing to learn. I would have thought wrong. So be it.
That's a terribly defensive position you've adopted. It's about the writing, which you do well, but there's really not much meat to it.
I would have thought a bit of maturity would be appropriate and that you might be willing to learn. I would have thought wrong. So be it.
What is this "PLONKED"? Is that your way of saying that you are not interested in anything more than praise? I'm completely at a loss over your immature responses so far. I'm only here to help.
Let's be fair. I propose that you post something more substantial and I will read it and give (yet another) honest opinion. Of course, if you don't want to or have nothing more substantial to offer, I'll undestand.
Here are your guidelines. Nothing "in the style of...". No imitating allowed. And of course no cleverness! You've proven your abilities there. You must have an original thought and it must have some weight to it.
This will be great fun for everyone and you should try to enjoy the exercise!
Let's be fair. I propose that you post something more substantial and I will read it and give (yet another) honest opinion. Of course, if you don't want to or have nothing more substantial to offer, I'll undestand.
Here are your guidelines. Nothing "in the style of...". No imitating allowed. And of course no cleverness! You've proven your abilities there. You must have an original thought and it must have some weight to it.
This will be great fun for everyone and you should try to enjoy the exercise!
Re: Hats Off
my hat is off, Hillary but my coat and dog-walking shoes are still on.Medusafern wrote:I really like Rejected Poem, and Poem #21 upon a first too-brief glance! I have always wished for a sense of humor in my poetry, but I've never been able to grasp one. Perhaps I take myself far too seriously. Hats off, Critic2!
Sincerely,
Hillary
I have placed your poetry near the top of my to-do list (category pleasure) so I will "see" you when I can
regards
critic2
My Dear Critic2,
I notice you are sidling up to someone who has chuckled at one or two of your minor offerings while ignoring the more serious discussion of your limits. Am I to take it that no criticism of your work will be given consideration?
I'm surprised at you. I've not been harsh, I give you credit for a modest amount of cleverness and the ability to put your words together nicely. Yet you respond to the mildest of reviews with rants and indignation.
I am here to help. You can become a better poet. You only need to open up to your possibilities and accept your shortcommings. Try to put your ego to the side for awhile. It will do you good. It's all about the writing.
Here, let's make this simple. Simply state that you have no interest in learning and we will consider the matter closed.
I notice you are sidling up to someone who has chuckled at one or two of your minor offerings while ignoring the more serious discussion of your limits. Am I to take it that no criticism of your work will be given consideration?
I'm surprised at you. I've not been harsh, I give you credit for a modest amount of cleverness and the ability to put your words together nicely. Yet you respond to the mildest of reviews with rants and indignation.
I am here to help. You can become a better poet. You only need to open up to your possibilities and accept your shortcommings. Try to put your ego to the side for awhile. It will do you good. It's all about the writing.
Here, let's make this simple. Simply state that you have no interest in learning and we will consider the matter closed.
Hillary said "I have always wished for a sense of humour in my poetry".
Just experiment. Certainly if you added any humorous twist to the one poem of yours I have properly read, Adultery, I doubt if it would fit. Try a completely new piece and look for quirky options. Maybe it will work, and maybe it won't. It takes time to acquire a voice that isn't naturally ones own.
Just experiment. Certainly if you added any humorous twist to the one poem of yours I have properly read, Adultery, I doubt if it would fit. Try a completely new piece and look for quirky options. Maybe it will work, and maybe it won't. It takes time to acquire a voice that isn't naturally ones own.
Isn't this fun! Critic2 now boldly offers advice to the second most talented poet on these pages while completely ignoring the advice he is being offered!
As I suggested before, you may want to try this egoless thing for awhile. It really will do you good.
As for advising someone who is a real talent, well, I must commend you on your audacity. And such insights you offer! Truly WOW suggestions.
Sadly, simply sidling up next to such a talent will not magically transfer her gift to you. You must put in the time and effort.
Now, where were we? Right. You were going to clarify to the masses whether or not you are interested in learning.
As I suggested before, you may want to try this egoless thing for awhile. It really will do you good.
As for advising someone who is a real talent, well, I must commend you on your audacity. And such insights you offer! Truly WOW suggestions.
Sadly, simply sidling up next to such a talent will not magically transfer her gift to you. You must put in the time and effort.
Now, where were we? Right. You were going to clarify to the masses whether or not you are interested in learning.
I cannot compete with the esteemed Critic2 when it comes to comic relief but I was so moved by his advice to the very talented Hillary that I thought I too might offer some encouragement.
So along with "Just experiment" I would like to add "Just do it!". I hope Hillary finds these words inspirational and soon will have us all rolling about in laughter.
Many thanks to the poets This message has been classified as spam and will be deleted by the moderators and Critic2 for these priceless words to all aspiring poets the world over.
So along with "Just experiment" I would like to add "Just do it!". I hope Hillary finds these words inspirational and soon will have us all rolling about in laughter.
Many thanks to the poets This message has been classified as spam and will be deleted by the moderators and Critic2 for these priceless words to all aspiring poets the world over.
Come on folks! I normally stay out of these little tiffs, but Critic2 adds so much humor and entertainment that I can't stand mute here. His suggestion of a poetry contest was extremely entertaining and, though, I didn't participate, I may in the future.
He's no Dante, (I knew Dante) but unfortunately I don't speak Italian!
Joe
He's no Dante, (I knew Dante) but unfortunately I don't speak Italian!
Joe
I presume you meant "hillaryous", but you couldn't even get that right and wrote "halarious" instead.
Damn it, the standard of trolling on this forum is pathetic.
You show absolutely no potential for ever entertaining me and so you must join the other corpses in my trash bin. PLONK useless Baby Troll, Smokey,
Love and Kisses
Critic2
Damn it, the standard of trolling on this forum is pathetic.
You show absolutely no potential for ever entertaining me and so you must join the other corpses in my trash bin. PLONK useless Baby Troll, Smokey,
Love and Kisses
Critic2