Euphoria, Sweet Euphoria

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hophead
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Euphoria, Sweet Euphoria

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irresistible,

the melody of your song

the unaffordable luxury



I look upon you, longingly

seeking salvation from your smile, or

warmth in your caress

I crave your gentle touch



I recall your cool hands

brushing the hair from my gaunt cheek

as you consumed me, bit by bit



you are the conqueror

a thief of endless souls



I am now, too fatigued

for war

so I fall into your seduction


together, we waltz through shadows and

down decadent streets

wearing only our discord

like the blemishes of conflict



my brilliant fire fades to a dying ember

a tarnished halo, or a crown of thorns?

have I been forsaken?

euphoria, sweet euphoria
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Re: Euphoria, Sweet Euphoria

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hophead wrote:irresistible,

the melody of your song

the unaffordable luxury



I look upon you, longingly

seeking salvation from your smile, or

warmth in your caress

I crave your gentle touch



I recall your cool hands

brushing the hair from my gaunt cheek

as you consumed me, bit by bit



you are the conqueror

a thief of endless souls



I am now, too fatigued

for war

so I fall into your seduction


together, we waltz through shadows and

down decadent streets

wearing only our pyjamas

like the blemishes of conflict



my brilliant fire fades to a dying ember

a tarnished halo, or a crown of thorns?

have I been forsaken?

euphoria, sweet euphoria
I have made only one change to your otherwise perfect ditty.
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hophead
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Re: Euphoria, Sweet Euphoria

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Thanks, I really like the edit. :D
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Re: Euphoria, Sweet Euphoria

Post by Cate »

this is a great poem for today

I'm not sure if this is an homage/tribute to Leonard Cohen but with the tone, the waltz, the crown of thorns ... it certainly feels like it could be.

I like it and the edit of bright pajamas works just fine. (actually if you read or perform it, it would be great to add the pajamas part just to see if people are attending - see if anybodies eyebrows lift)
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