We All Play The Cards

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hophead
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We All Play The Cards

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the singers voice grows weary

he’s sang out his last song

he’s been singing it to no one

for oh so long



the painters hands they tremble

his eye’s are edged with tears

he’s painted a portrait of hope

but nobody really cares



we all play the cards

that we were dealt with in our hands

and we all play our lives

the best that we can

right to the bitter end



the circus clown is frowning

because no one came to laugh

the strong man looks up sadly

his heart has broken in half



the poet’s dreams are shattered

he’s lost all reason and rhyme

he just can’t understand

the changes coming with time



we all play the cards

that we were dealt with in our hands

and we all play our lives

the best that we can

right to the bitter end



the holy man is kneeling

he’s kneeling down to prey

I guess he doesn’t know it yet

today’s his judgement day



the loner he see’s the change

but he doesn’t give a damn

for him it’s always been this way

no one to lend a hand



we all play the cards

that we were dealt with in our hands

and we all play our lives

the best that we can

right to the bitter end
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Re: We All Play The Cards

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3 apostrophe mistakes, and one religious blunder.

apart from that I see some potential here.
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Re: We All Play The Cards

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fishfishquaileye wrote:3 apostrophe mistakes, and one religious blunder.

apart from that I see some potential here.
Thanks. I apologise for punctuation errors, likely due to lack of sleep and speed of typing.
As for the "religious blunder", I guess it is all perspective. ;-)
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