Your laughter (second version)

Sandra · Post by **Sandra** » Sat Oct 09, 2004 4:56 am

(dedicated to Pedro, a language teacher)

Your laughter
like a wave
strikes me,
touches me,
and intimately corners me.
You don´t know
but I wait
that little death
so longed.
I wait so much that laughter
so powerful and strong.
like a complete desire
that bursts without warning
and makes me feel alive

LaurieAK · Post by **LaurieAK** » Sat Oct 09, 2004 9:19 pm

Sandra~

A very sweet poem. I like how this 'laugh' turns into something that eminates from within you and not just your object of desire. Like a melting of two, even if the other does not know it. I like how you give the reader your sense of anticipation, "that little death" between the sound and the silence. Very nice.

regards,
Laurie

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Sat Oct 09, 2004 9:25 pm

Hi Sandra ~

I have to get back to work here very soon, but wanted to tell you how wonderfully these lines work together for me, particularly the last three words:

like a wave
strikes me,
touches me,
and intimately corners me.

~ Lizzy