Untitled 1

This is for your own works!!!
Post Reply
User avatar
Ren
Posts: 68
Joined: Wed Mar 29, 2006 7:39 pm

Untitled 1

Post by Ren »

One step
At a time
Today your body
Tomorrow your mind.
imaginary friend
Posts: 1371
Joined: Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:09 am
Location: Vancouver, Canada

Re: Untitled 1

Post by imaginary friend »

Is this about controlling? Or consoling? I think it should be the other way around:

Today your mind,
Tomorrow your bod,
One step at a time,
Plod-itty-plod.

I prefer your Teletype piece. It has more rhythm, and perfect punctuation.
Post Reply

Return to “Writing, Music and Art by the Forum members”