my poor soul, so full of love for you, sorrowful bitter tears is bleeding,
my abyssal heart drowned into the sea of missing you's exceeding,
and you, my secret love, don't even know how much my body yours is needing,
that only the impossible to fulfill concept of you loving me my mind is feeding ...
about you taking me with you away - my mind is always dreaming,
about myself your wife and ever lasting love - my soul is wishing,
about yourself my husband, ever lasting Complaint Wall - my thoughts are pleading,
about living all my from now on life by your side - my heart is willing ...
it might appear so strange to you, i know - my unaccountable amount of feeling ...
don't blame on me, my far away and secret love - i am so desperately you missing,
please try to understand my ardent full of love for you poor soul - try to it listening,
my life so far has been so meaningless so many empty years - just try believing,
my missing you, my secret love for you, my wish to be your woman - try conceiving...
and always know that somewhere in the world i am you needing ...
... ING
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... ING
Waiting for the miracle to come...
Re: ... ING
Hi Elena ~
Your way of writing is very unique; previously, with your series of words strung together with hyphens. Like with the difference between active and inactive verbs, direct and indirect sentences, as I read, I keep thinking, "Okay, for sure she's going to screw this up this time... we're almost to the end of this line, and I haven't 'gotten' it, yet; and then the end comes and you've still managed to pull it together and I've 'gotten' it.
Then, with this one, without the hyphen linkages, but things being stated so indirectly, as though coming through the side door, and I experience that same kind of questioning. It causes me to wonder if it happens to also replicate the necessary indirectness of this particular relationship; and if the nature of the relationship changed, if that would de facto be reflected in your poetic style, as well. It's interesting to me how you maintain consistency with your approach, while still expressing your meanings.
~ Lizzy
Your way of writing is very unique; previously, with your series of words strung together with hyphens. Like with the difference between active and inactive verbs, direct and indirect sentences, as I read, I keep thinking, "Okay, for sure she's going to screw this up this time... we're almost to the end of this line, and I haven't 'gotten' it, yet; and then the end comes and you've still managed to pull it together and I've 'gotten' it.
Then, with this one, without the hyphen linkages, but things being stated so indirectly, as though coming through the side door, and I experience that same kind of questioning. It causes me to wonder if it happens to also replicate the necessary indirectness of this particular relationship; and if the nature of the relationship changed, if that would de facto be reflected in your poetic style, as well. It's interesting to me how you maintain consistency with your approach, while still expressing your meanings.
~ Lizzy
"Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken."
~ Oscar Wilde
~ Oscar Wilde