WILL YOU TAKE MY HAND?WILL YOU WALK WITH ME.

[jimbo]

Will you take my hand. will you walk with me?
to your vision of eternity.
of love and life and light.
will you take your cup.
will you fill it up.
with the vintage wine of time.

will you stroll with me.
through our valleys green.
on a moonlit starry night.
and watch our shepherd of the stars.
give.love and light and life

will you walk with me
will you take my hand.
oe.r this jewelled golden strand
can i wash your feet
in the ebbing tide of love and light and life.

will you take my hand will you dance with me
oer the bridge of our uncertainty
of endless love on flighted dove
the final station passed'
of light and life and love.

[lizzytysh]

Well, you certainly did expound on that idea!! Beautifully. I'm guessing that these images may have been somewhere in your mind when you simplified it all the way you did originally.

I love the feelings that weave throughout your poem. Such lovely invitations.


~ Lizzy

[dangermouse]

"..........oe.r this jewelled golden strand"

That is so so retro, so Wordsworthian, so Tennyson, so Arnold, so Burns, so so cool.
Yeah, cool

[raggletagglegypsy]

Hi Jimbo - thought this was lovely. Hi Dangermouse - your like me quite new to this forum. Looks like you know your poetry. Would you have a look at mine? It's called Finding my way. It's about shagging so you might like it. Cheers

[Byron]

Hello jimbo. You kept hold of that hand all through the piece. It takes us along too. I enjoyed reading this.

[jimbo]

THANK you Liz,DanGErsmouse Byron and Raggle taggle gypysy oh;;;;;;;;;;;;;;Christy Moore sang it i think
for all your kind words..................

[dangermouse]

Hi Raggletaggle
Would love to look at yours.
Where can I find it.
Is it long?
Just point me to it and I'll be happyto - cool!

[raggletagglegypsy]

Dangermouse - look down the list of poems - Finding my way. Will you be able to? It's just a nice length.