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you didn't understand my hesitation
my long glances and longer silences
now that's all over
you are free
from my dry and pandering presence

you spoke to him at my celebration
as i shuffled about drunken and dazed
now you have each other
glad to be of assistance

i finally made my mind up
too late too late
it's funny as you both wander away
my heart dragging on the pavement
behind you


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this poem was just a mock-up of my fragility in the relationship dept. me and jodie are still great friends. i over-dramatized the situation. i can laugh at it all now for it's patheticness.

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Post by linda_lakeside »

Hi elezar (again),

I think we all tend to over-dramatize our emotions during a relationship screwup. I didn't find anything you said 'pathetic'. It was another good poem, I thought. And..I'm glad you gave us a little extra with your explanation.

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linda, thanks. i just feel like the chief blunderer most times when it comes to relationships. i guess thats standard to over-dramatize like you said. the best attitude is to just "let it be"? i'm gonna try that.
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I like the image of your heart dragging on the pavement. Been there done that.

"Paper Thin Hotel"

...A heavy burden lifted from my soul
I heard that love was out of my control
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"Doorhinge rhymes with orange" Leonard Cohen
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Post by linda_lakeside »

Tri-me,

Thank you once more. I have a difficult time pinpointing what it is about a poem that hits me.

Yes, there are certain images, but mostly it's the overall 'feel' of the poem that attracts me. I really wish I could become more detailed in my comments. The image you mentioned is a good one.

Well, I can only read and comment when I can. Maybe if I keep doing it, I'll
get better at it.

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