soon

ilang · Post by **ilang** » Sun May 02, 2004 7:14 pm

soon

I’ll soon enough be hanging
hanging by a thread

you’ll soon enough be sleeping
sleeping on my bed

and with a drop of mercy
from these mountains of the dead

I’ll soon enough be dreaming
dreaming in your head

peace
ISL

Pete · Post by **Pete** » Sun May 02, 2004 7:53 pm

I love this.

Short poems are not always easy... this needs no more

Pete

Harry Harpin · Post by **Harry Harpin** » Sun May 02, 2004 8:44 pm

soon

Soon I'll be hanging in my bed
you'll think I'm sleeping
but I'll be dead
It wasn't your looks
or the things that you said
you just fell in love
with the colour red

margaret · Post by **margaret** » Sun May 02, 2004 11:14 pm

Sorry Harry, I think the original version was better.

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Mon May 03, 2004 3:04 am

I love it, too, Ilang [and Pete]. I love the soft, passive feel of it, as well as the twist of the last line.