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for you

Post by lazariuk »

It will come as a surprise
for you to know
that I like you
more than I like myself
it is not a surprise for me
I get it now
what delights her
is what I am for you
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
Myra
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Post by Myra »

hello, I like short poems like this one.
I hope you don't mind if I try my own version in a different direction.


Would it come as a surprise
for you to know that
I like you;
I like being close to you?

Is it a surprise to you, that once
on a still night
you delighted me
more than the stars in the lake?
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Post by lazariuk »

Myra wrote:hello, I like short poems like this one.
I hope you don't mind if I try my own version in a different direction.

Hi Myra

very nice change of directions. I hope you don't mind that I try a similar response.

I cherish the delight
we share together
and that you do not
call it love

Every star you can see
in the dark still lake
a mirror of the
one above
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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Post by Myra »

Mirrored back

'I cherish the delight
we share together
and that you do not
call it love

Every star you can see
in the dark still lake
a mirror of the
one above'


above one
a mirror of two
lying still in the dark.
You can see every star

call a song
as soft as their light.
Together they share
delights to be cherished.
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Post by Lion of Lions »

the stars in the lake
were Paris Hilton
and Christiano Ronaldo
one goes to the Ball
the other kicks it
that night
they both scored
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Post by lazariuk »

Lion of Lions wrote:the stars in the lake
were you once there or are you just looking into some kind of stagnant pool?
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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lazariuk wrote:
are you just looking into some kind of stagnant pool?
yes, my dollar note has been on the side of the table for hours.
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I enjoyed reading your exchanges, Jack and Myra.

It was all very tranquil there for awhile.


~ Lizzy
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edited again to remove bad poem containing one good pun as well as notes about my confusion regarding pool tables and discount hookers.
only leaving a note because I kept popping it up and down. :oops:
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Lion of Lions wrote: yes, my dollar note has been on the side of the table for hours.
I see you are a gambling man.

Once while walking pass a casino with my son he spotted a note on the window of a car door. It was before he learned to read and wanted me to read the note to him, which I did. It said " Go ahead and gamble all you want but you better know my limits"

He then asked me what that meant and so I told him that the person writing the note was probably a partner of one who was inside gambling and that gamblers are fond of saying that they know their limits of how much they can gamble but that the partner was saying that they should also know their partner's limits.

He then told me that it probably wasn't good that one was gambling and i said that it seemed to me that both of them were gambling and that the one writing the note was maybe even willing to gamble more. With a few more questions he seemed to appreciate the point I was making but he was a bit troubled by it. So I turned it around and pointed out the value of what can be gained by them learning how much they can gamble on each other. That seemed to please him and we continued our stroll.

I like gambling myself as every time I place my left foot forward I let my right fall back.
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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The song I call
is for the boat
to take you
across the water

That you may know
and come to be
the one that calls
you daughter
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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lazariuk wrote:The song I call
is for the boat
to take you
across the water

That you may know
and come to be
the one that calls
you daughter


please, please tell me you wrote this.
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Lion of Lions wrote:

please, please tell me you wrote this.
J'ai écrit que
I wrote that
one for each of your pleases
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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lovely, relaxing...
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