Cold Indian Summer

[greta]

Cold Indian Summer

The red hot sun departed
And it did give way
To this rough and lonely
White, white winter.

Though snow is not winter
And flowers not always spring
I do fear, my friend
What this departure will bring

They replaced the sun
But by far it's not the same
The streetlamp gives no heat
And its rays are weak.

Now... I use it.
A wretched replacement
You might say.
But in the twilight
I did lose my way.

I'm cold and cruel
My hear has turned to ice
And in this hot Indian Summer
It will quickly melt away.

[George.Wright]

I did not understand the use of numbers, Greta , but the poems fine.
Georges

[lizzytysh]

The numbers are a glitch in her computer system or program or computer something like that. Not at all intentional on Greta's part. Your second verse, Greta, is very very nice.

[greta]

these numbers vere completely unintentional...
no more copy paste without checking everything twice!

Lizzytysh.. I also like the second verse the best...

[lizzytysh]

I'm glad to hear that you agree, Greta.....it flows beautifully with both truth and images.

[greta]

thank you lizzytysh for your kind words
I don't think my poems are worth much
but if i publish them i get comments and trough comments i hopefully improve and maybe someday i can create a poem that is truly a work of art.(hmm.. maybe in my thirties.. so i got some 13 years to go )

[Paula]

How old are you Greta? Is it not very difficult to write a poem in a language that is not your own?

[greta]

i'm 17

[lizzytysh]

Dear Greta ~

Precious avatar. I wish I could have written poems like yours at 17, in any language ~ or at my current age.

~ Lizzytysh

[greta]

thank you once again for your kindness lizzytysh...
I'm very happy with my avatar too...

But concerning poetry..
lizzytysh i've noticed that you haven't posted any poems
have you ever written poetry? If you haven't you should at least try.
You may think that they aren't any good but i think that you hae at least advantage over me. That is life experience... My poems, i'm afraid are just a theory, imagination.. while i believe others share their experiences. They see things clearly, much more sophisticated...

[lizzytysh]

There's nothing wrong with theory, Greta ~ chronicle where you're at now, and later check back to see how close you were. As for me, good observation ~ no poetry postings from me and unlikely to be any! Very few attempts and very awkward ones at that. My mind freezes. Methinks Poetry 101 may be in order! Thanks for your encouragement, regardless .

[Young dr. Freud]

Notes on the Patient L,

Sudden and unexpected improvement!
Patient realizes the benefits of "Poetry 101". Must contact Miranda with the good news. This is excellent progress!


Young dr. Freud

[lizzytysh]

Lizzytysh speaks only for herself. Has never advocated Poetry 101 for many others, who are not in need of same. Lizzytysh has always felt need of Poetry 101 and, hence, does not post poetry. Lizzytysh speaks only for herself.

[THEbewhiskeredMan]

you call this a poem?
haaa
even i can do better than this......
ps,i know you are magneticcrys good friend,and thanks to you ,i will find her direct location,so,if she doesn`t answer your calls one day,know this-YOU have killed her....
btw,as you know,i have many "hacker" friends,who have already broken in to magneticcrys PM....so,lizzytysh,i am not the one you think i am,i have never even known any partisans.....

bye,sweet bloody dreams to you all.....
i shall go now and visit the lady of my life in her sleep....

[greta]

The only way to deal with trolls is to limit your reaction to reminding others not to respond to trolls