Scale (another edit, maybe)

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Manna re- wrote:The speckled twilight void
Fell into me
Intrinsically
of course, of course
a sigh among trinities
I am Who am
jes playing
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Oh, Laurie, for crying out -
do you think if a poem has an ! or !!, that it can't also have an ahhhhhhh? I'm not debating!!!...???!$%@^$&$^#)@ though I might be now, I'm not sure. I'm talking about taking the sigh AWAY from the !!
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I CANNOT SIGH AN EXCLAMATION EITHER. LAURIE IS RIGHT. I AGREE!!!!!!!

hmmmm. sigh. I am not arguing with you, and I don't know why you think I am.
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I don't even think it is debate-able that you can "sigh" an "exclamation!"
Why not???!!!

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"I smile when I'm angry . . . "

~ L.Cohen
Isn't the difference between what's going on inside [internally] and how it's expressed [externally] is what makes for understatement?


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yeah, but he called himself a cheater/liar in the next line
;-)
and anyway, I'm not angry, just confused.
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I wasn't referring to you, Manna. I was sticking to the line itself and what can be apparent contradictions... [see my edit, as well].


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I was unprepared for my simple statement turning into nonsense. A complete waste of time. Not the least bit 'angry'...but enlightened that the most innocuous comment is not immune to ridiculous debate.
and now more time wasted..bye
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Snoopy wrote:Yesterday I was a dog. Today I'm a dog.
Tomorrow I'll probably still be a dog. Sigh!
There's so little hope for advancement.

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Ah, yes... the full-breath'd variety... and the kind one tends to make when bored... a sudden exhalation of air and sound, as in heaving a sigh.
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And we all know the puppy sighs dont we??
love is not forgotten......
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I think we do, but would they have an exclamation point after them? Or are you referring to the Snoopy ones of lament?


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Yes of course snoopys. but lets not get away from Manas poem....................
I think the first draft is perfect for what my words are worth....
it Rocks

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I think the first draft is perfect for what my words are worth....
it Rocks
I was rather taken by it, too. Inward and outward.


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0ne recent morning I was riding my bike to work, like ~always. I was heading up rt 79, East Hill, when I looked up and saw some morning sunbeams heading sideways out of a cloud. There was a patch of blue, and I was aware that I was looking beyond the clouds toward stuff I couldn't see. There are stars and planets out there, and knowing that made me aware of how small I am. Then I remembered that I am made of molecules, which are made of atoms, which are made of protons and electrons, which are made of things we don't understand, last I knew*. This made me aware of how huge I am. I thought one of my pet thoughts, that solar systems are stuff moving around stuff, and atoms are stuff moving around stuff, and as such, they resemble each other. I (we) exist somewhere between these two realms. Sometimes I wonder if the solar systems and galaxies out there are substructures of something relatively ginormous that may even be sentient in its own level. That's what fed my poem; I have no reservations about sharing it.

*The electron has a mass, but it is a wave. It is a particle and a wave, and it is made of something like energy-mass, I think. A neutron is kind of like a proton and an electron in one (LOVE! sigh.). The stuff that makes up a proton and a neutron - well, I don't know what it is. It's not completely indivisible, but I shouldn't talk as though nuclear chemistry is something I understand all that well. Mass and energy can interconvert. Isn't that beautiful? I am in awe of everything. And compared to the amt of space a proton takes up, the distance from an atomic nucleus to an electron is huge. And what keeps an atom together? The electrons are moving around the nucleus. There are + charges and - charges, and these are attractive to each other. And there is gravity, which yes, does act at this small scale. But I was told when I took chemistry, that neither the attractive forces of + & - charges, nor gravity nor the two of them together was enough, as calculated, to hold an atom together. So what is the missing force? I don't know. Magic. (Everything I don't know is magic. ;-) )

well, anyway. That's what fed my poem. That's why I called it Scale. It didn't have anything to do with fish skin, as some seem to have suspected.

:idea:

And now, for my next poem...
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