one Leonard morning

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mat james
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one Leonard morning

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one Leonard morning

one Leonard morning
with your ear-phones humming
I knelt at that delta
of you

from alpha
to omega
we both sang to please ya
and like that bird on a wire
you flew

the snake-look
the cold stare
that alone-ness
wasn't there

just me
and Leonard and you

he teased, I pleased
we scored, you roared
as all swooped
through that delta
of time

we laughed
he sang
our orgasms rang
to some reptilian rhyme

..one Leonard morning
with your ear-phones humming
I knelt at that delta
of you

from alpha to omega
we all came to please ya
and like that bird on a wire
you --------------- ^-- ~~ flew ~~--^




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Mat,

I endured a long night, a Richie night. Long time ago, true story. An old turntable did the trick. All night long, truly.
'In the depth of winter, I finally learned that within me there lay an invincible summer' - Albert Camus
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"Endured"? Are you sure? Correct word?

Mat ~ I've no idea what you changed; however, the changes brought it all together. Sensual, evocative, erotic, and clearly pleasurable for you both. Here's to both of you for your great morning. I love your poem, title to final line.


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Hi Mat,

A nice rhymer. As only the "L" of Leonard is capitalized, thought of e.e. cummings
and that the content relates homonymously with that poet's name.
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A luverly ditty (forgive my choice of words for your piece of work

Reminds me a bit of Neil Young's Pocohantas. (spell checker please!)

That's it. I just wanted my opinion/testimonial to be forever linked with above poem. I can say no more.
~ The smell of perfume in the air, bits of beauty everywhere ~ Leonard Cohen.
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Lizzy and Linda,
the poem may be about someone other than you
but it was written
for
Cohenites, like you

It pleases me that you connected with the experience!
I have worked on it a bit since the original draft
and even more since your observant comment Lizzy.

I hope you enjoy the mood of it all.

Steven, your "e.e. cummings" comment has had an impact on the third to last line!

Thanks for the feedback,
Mat.
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Mat!

What a nice sentiment. This is def. a copy and paste. Even though it may not be 'for' me, or Lizzy, I'm certain she's just as pleased as I am.

Light as a Breeze has always been at the top of my Cohen songs list - don't know why :lol:

Best to you and yours for the holidays. Again, I'm lost for words.

Linda (from the heart), and yes, the mood of it all works very fine for me :D
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Awww... that's so sweet of you to say, Mat. Linda's right, I'm just as pleased as she is by it. I really like it a lot. Old changes, new changes. A lovely Leonard morning.


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