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mickey_one
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Comp. poem 1 Comments welcome

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Poem 1

That's right, it's come to this

Is that Leonard I see
Surely it cannot be
It is, he's carrying a bike
The one he rode when he was a little tyke
I saw him ride it in I'm your Man
He's swapping it now, at least that's the plan
for a bigger bike that he can ride
But if they won't swap it
he has a Colt 45
It's their choice really
Dead or alive
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Post by lizzytysh »

I really liked the contrast of the little kid's tricycle being swapped to get a bigger, adult one... and a Colt 45 being brought out, with the ultimate payment, if they wouldn't do it. It was a poem of such extremes and the extremes made it humourous.


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