Flyer On the Windscreen
You get back to your car
Laden with produce
The aisles of brand names weighing now upon your finger tips
Pained by lack of circulation
You drop your goods into your trunk
You note the car next to yours has parked inadequately
Curse the waves of folk out there
Who don't do It properly
And click your electronic locking button
The car regales the lot with piercing shrill
"I have arrived", lights flashing
You slump into the drivers well
To look out at your bonnet
And see some flyer stuck under your wiper
Fucking hell
Pink coloured
You tear it away and go to throw it to its doom
But a word catches your eye
Soul
A soul stuck to your car in earnest plea
Saturday night at the Soul Train
You ponder your entirety
Where were you being delivered next?
You look out upon the car park
At the different colours
The cold wind indifferent lifts you from your seat
You are born upon a new freedom
It takes you beyond your tired barriers
It moves you
On the dance floor Saturday night.
Flyer On the Windscreen
Flyer On the Windscreen
Last edited by JiminyC on Sun May 20, 2007 1:08 pm, edited 2 times in total.
Yes, that works better.
In that case I would delete the "your" in the line above. Somehow it ties the line together better.
Sometimes less is better.
Perhaps it even makes the line more powerful.
Regards, Matj.
"I have arrived", your lights flashing
In that case I would delete the "your" in the line above. Somehow it ties the line together better.
Sometimes less is better.
Perhaps it even makes the line more powerful.
Regards, Matj.
"Without light or guide, save that which burned in my heart." San Juan de la Cruz.