Way Out Beyond

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Hero In The Seaweed
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Way Out Beyond

Post by Hero In The Seaweed »

i have fallen out of your
sure and steady orbit,
i know i have.

i can tell
by the way i float so
aimlessly, drift
through the days without
meaningful direction.

and it's cold out here, so cold.

the newspapers today
tell me that scientists have
discovered a new planet
in our solar system,
way out beyond Pluto.

it's easy to believe.
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lizzytysh
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Post by lizzytysh »

Hi Hero in the Seaweed ~

I like how you capture the distancing in a relationship; the kind that eventually becomes undeniable. The new planet beyond Pluto gives it an even larger scope that makes your reluctance, but acceptance, clear.


~ Lizzy
"Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken."
~ Oscar Wilde
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