Sonnet

[Everett Wade]

How often does it seem
Our lives would make a play of Death?
Emotions echo of his icy tones
With murmurs that coax doubts
Out of their dark little homes.
When sorrows do their best to mimic
Raindrops upon a grave.
A never-ceasing pattering--

That chants throughout the night.
When our lives would take delight
In wrenching us through the wretched grasp of despair
So then, deep in the bedarkened heart-- a light may break
One not our own,
A light that in contrast shines bright.

This, the gentle love of another,
Comes like a cool morning mist
Unadorned
And quiet.
Undemanding
Yet one thing required.

A lily's bowed head,
Responding to the gentle vapor's touch
Opens slowly, letting
The last droplets of rain run down it's leaves.
Withered petals emerge, resurrected--
And unfold into daylight.

My heart
How it wills to live!
How it yearns to open to love.
The damp spirit of the evening
Shall never close it again.

[lizzytysh]

Dear Ev,

I found this poem of yours simply beautiful, tender, and touching. I loved your use of the various forms of water and moisture with their life-giving and life-robbing properties...as well as the pure sensuality of it. Very beautiful.

~Lizzytysh

[Andrew McGeever]

Why did you title your poem "sonnet", when it isn't?
Andrew McGeever

[Sandra]

real love is coming.......you can feel it......

[Everett Wade]

Andrew-- If you will look more closely you will see this poem has no name as of yet, I merely put "sonnet" in the subject line because the feelings put across in this poem were ones that I had seen in some of shakespeares sonnets. I am fully aware this poem does not meet the requirements of a true sonnet lol. Just as natalie's poem "Jewellery Store on Gov't St" is not titled "new poem" this one is not titled "sonnet" - I am still looking for a title... Maybe some of you guys have suggestions? I thought about just putting under "How Often Does"... but didn't quite like that. Lizzy, Sandra, Andrew-- thank you for the replies.
Ev

[Bedarkened Heart]

Ev, I think you need a girlfriend.

[lizzytysh]

That seems to be a fairly universal perception of everyone. Listening to Leonard's music and song, one might suppose he does, too. Nice of you to include Ev in that category, as well, however.
~Lizzytysh

[Everett Wade]

thanks for the kind words lizzy--
bedarkened-- getting me a girlfriend might have a chance of getting me out of the situation-- but much more likely it would get me into the mess I was speaking of...
Actually I was writing the poem, because I do have people that love me. =)
Ev

[lizzytysh]

Yes, Ev, and I believe you probably have many who love you.
~Lizzytysh

[fishfishquaileye]

yes

[Cate]

I just searched Everett Wade trying to figure out who he is/was and I came across a post that greg had made years ago. I love finding forgotten jewels like that.

~~
... so

..... where is your sonnet?

[mat james]

Hi Everett and all,

there are all sorts of sonnets; usually named after a poet who did it one way particularly well.

I noticed that the first 2 verses are sonnet-esq in that you have the 8 lined verse and the 6 lined verse following.
I suppose you could call the first 2 verses a "free form sonnet" of a sort, though there is no iambic pentameter or twist in the argument/position after the 8th line, which I enjoy.

But moving on; the fact that you stumble off into writing a poem after reading a few sonnets is a wonderful thing in my eyes.
Maybe you could give your poem a title that suggests just that process.....post-sonneteering

Your poem certainly is filled with thoughts awash in a sea of feelings, which is the meat of a sonnet; the skeleton being the meter, twist and structure, as I understand it.

Thanks for the enjoyment/sojourn.

MatbbgJ