Advice for Michael.

Andrew McGeever · Post by **Andrew McGeever** » Thu Nov 09, 2006 5:50 pm

Advice for Michael.

Yes, you scrawl about a bear
seeking food by the river.

Yes, you scribble of salmon
swimming upstream, about to leap.

Yet your poem is incomplete
until bear and salmon meet.

Andrew McGeever.

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Thu Nov 09, 2006 6:34 pm

I LOVE this, Andrew... its simplicity and reality... its clarity and truth.

Is your middle name Michael

?

It's great to see you here, again

.

~ Lizzy

Byron · Post by **Byron** » Fri Nov 24, 2006 1:18 am

should that be

"bear and salmon meat"?

Andrew McGeever · Post by **Andrew McGeever** » Fri Nov 24, 2006 2:27 am

Dear Lizzy,
A couple of things: my middle name isn't Michael. He happens to be "my best friend".
His mention in the title is the stuff of another post, but this is the closest I've reached to a definition of poetry, so far

.
And as for that Byron: well, he would say that, wouldn't he?

More later,
it's getting late, and I've got work tomorrow.

Andrew.

Kush · Post by **Kush** » Sun Jan 14, 2007 5:16 am

I wanted to comment on this but never did. This may well be your best and yet most elusive effort. It doesnt make sense at first read but there is a symmetry to the image (for want of a better expression). It has a haiku-like twist.

Andrew McGeever · Post by **Andrew McGeever** » Mon Jan 15, 2007 3:05 am

Dear Kush,
Thanks for your considered reply.
There's a history behind this piece: my best friend, Michael, showed me a poem he'd written and asked for comments/ analysis/ criticism.
His poem (the subject of which remains private), was long, too long in my opinion. Yes, it read well, yet my writing mantra has always been " when in doubt, cut it out".
Hence my reply.
Michael said my poem resonated with his life, offered a metaphor, worked on several levels.
I'll read it in 2 week's time, and Michael will be in the audience.

Andrew.