Poem A

This is for your own works!!!
Post Reply
LaurieAK
Posts: 1338
Joined: Wed Nov 20, 2002 2:00 am

Poem A

Post by LaurieAK »

Poem A:


Ti Amore, My First Love

Though dust and fickle memory have long since claimed the scripts
Imbedded among my baser times your soft, sweet lines of first love linger.

All along the fair lanes of lust I’ve set and fallen to many love snares
Most were but a fleeting tryst, though some would last for hours.
Oh, but several lasted many weeks, and two, too glorious, even managed years.
Many deserve no warm memory, but
E’er will your loving words be dear.
Diane

Post by Diane »

Nightstalker, you have confessed to this one. It is a poem that has to be read slowly to get the full impact of the lines. I enjoyed it, thanks. Clever what you did with the first letters, too.

Diane
LaurieAK
Posts: 1338
Joined: Wed Nov 20, 2002 2:00 am

Post by LaurieAK »

Hi Nightstalker~

Well you confessed 8) to this on another thread. And disclosed the 'Ti Amore' acronym that the first letters of the lines were supposed to reveal. Sorry the "R" line didn't get fixed.

Do you want me to edit your poem and fix this??

Anyways, my favorite part of this piece is lines 2 & 3. The alliteration rolls nicely off the tongue. It is a sweet piece and the acronym aspect is just too clever!!

Thanks,
Laurie
User avatar
Nightstalker
Posts: 142
Joined: Wed Dec 07, 2005 5:31 pm
Location: rural NC USA

Post by Nightstalker »

Oh, no! Please leave it as presented. The error was all mine and shall live forever in cyberspace. LOL The poems you chose are superb!

Just for the record the line that begins with 'Many' should read
"Remembering a few bring no warm memory, but"

As I told Liz, it is hard for me to write on a given topic; the ideas should strike me from the twinkle of stars, the call of gulls, or the wash of waves......... ENYWAY, I needed a hook and used Ti Amore as that.

Thanks for the kind words, for offering to edit it post facto and again for the great job you did officiating.
"For the captain had quitted the long drawn strife
And in far Simoree had taken a wife." (R Kipling)
mickey_one
Posts: 1533
Joined: Sun Feb 15, 2004 3:11 pm
Location: Hello Lovely Flowers, Hello Lovely Trees

Post by mickey_one »

this piece took me to a different gentler era and I enjoyed it for that reason and thank Mr N.
Post Reply

Return to “Writing, Music and Art by the Forum members”