Poem A:
Ti Amore, My First Love
Though dust and fickle memory have long since claimed the scripts
Imbedded among my baser times your soft, sweet lines of first love linger.
All along the fair lanes of lust I’ve set and fallen to many love snares
Most were but a fleeting tryst, though some would last for hours.
Oh, but several lasted many weeks, and two, too glorious, even managed years.
Many deserve no warm memory, but
E’er will your loving words be dear.
Poem A
Hi Nightstalker~
Well you confessed
to this on another thread. And disclosed the 'Ti Amore' acronym that the first letters of the lines were supposed to reveal. Sorry the "R" line didn't get fixed.
Do you want me to edit your poem and fix this??
Anyways, my favorite part of this piece is lines 2 & 3. The alliteration rolls nicely off the tongue. It is a sweet piece and the acronym aspect is just too clever!!
Thanks,
Laurie
Well you confessed

Do you want me to edit your poem and fix this??
Anyways, my favorite part of this piece is lines 2 & 3. The alliteration rolls nicely off the tongue. It is a sweet piece and the acronym aspect is just too clever!!
Thanks,
Laurie
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Oh, no! Please leave it as presented. The error was all mine and shall live forever in cyberspace. LOL The poems you chose are superb!
Just for the record the line that begins with 'Many' should read
"Remembering a few bring no warm memory, but"
As I told Liz, it is hard for me to write on a given topic; the ideas should strike me from the twinkle of stars, the call of gulls, or the wash of waves......... ENYWAY, I needed a hook and used Ti Amore as that.
Thanks for the kind words, for offering to edit it post facto and again for the great job you did officiating.
Just for the record the line that begins with 'Many' should read
"Remembering a few bring no warm memory, but"
As I told Liz, it is hard for me to write on a given topic; the ideas should strike me from the twinkle of stars, the call of gulls, or the wash of waves......... ENYWAY, I needed a hook and used Ti Amore as that.
Thanks for the kind words, for offering to edit it post facto and again for the great job you did officiating.
"For the captain had quitted the long drawn strife
And in far Simoree had taken a wife." (R Kipling)
And in far Simoree had taken a wife." (R Kipling)
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