non-liniar hum ho

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non-liniar hum ho

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as i watch that dog
jumping into the tree
to grab on to the branches
and leaves
i think "this is so non-liniar"

it actualy happened
on a full moon
and things were so loony
and i thought "this is so non-liniar"

i felt weightless
and out of breath
and i knew i wouldnt
know eloquence
even if i made love to her
and i muttered "this is so non-liniar"

so i chided myself
its all a joke
and what
are you doing here,now
and i guaffawed "this is so non-liniar"

i took a drag
knowing my lungs
were less than apreciative
the smoke swirled
from my nostrils
into the night air
and i coughed "this is so non-liniar"

as they say
in the storys and tales
i pinched myself
to make sure i was-
real
and i whispered
"this is so non-liniar"
breathe deep and live
eeey
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Post by eeey »

Well Elazer,

I dislike most of the "poetry" on this site but I have to tell you that this "poem" is surprisingly good.

Also the concluding line of each verse "...this is so non-linear" is rather clever.


eeey
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Post by elazar »

eeeey,
thank you for the kind words.i wish i could here more about other peoples non-linear experiences too.
salute,
elazar
breathe deep and live
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