counterpoints

tom.d.stiller · Post by **tom.d.stiller** » Fri Mar 18, 2005 3:30 pm

counterpoints

big city girl caught in the rural
sealess bleakness of a lake
that slowly thaws while flowers
spend their fragrance on country girls
fate ditched on city trottoirs.
to each what's not her own is given.

and yet into each of her winters
spring will come. wireless birds
keep spreading this old news while
yesterday's seamless weathermen
tell surface stories. underneath
the thinning crust of ice life resides.

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tom.d.stiller

Joined: 07 Mar 2003
Posts: 1000
Location: ... between the ocean and your open vein ...

This is my 1,000th post.

I'm tempted to say: "A small step for a man - and an even smaller for the Forum."

Cheers to all.

tom

Sandra · Post by **Sandra** » Fri Mar 18, 2005 3:38 pm

Congratulations for your 1000 post in the forum!!!!!! (it had to be a poem)

linda_lakeside · Post by **linda_lakeside** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 2:22 am

That's a very beautiful poem, Tom. Congratulations on your 1000th post!

Linda.

paints · Post by **paints** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 2:38 am

... and to your 1000 as well Linda!

linda_lakeside · Post by **linda_lakeside** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 2:45 am

Thanks, paints. You're a sweetheart. Some wouldn't agree. I almost dropped the ball, though. I do believe you know that!

Linda.

Perth · Post by **Perth** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 2:49 am

I almost dropped the ball, though. I do believe you know that!

My dear [ahem] 'lady' I have on occasion, thought that you had 'almost' dropped both.

linda_lakeside · Post by **linda_lakeside** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 2:58 am

You're a riot, Perth. Why not go find Mirth. Have some fun. Have a coupla beer? A few laughs?

Linda.

tom.d.stiller · Post by **tom.d.stiller** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 6:39 am

linda_lakeside wrote:That's a very beautiful poem, Tom. Congratulations on your 1000th post!

Linda.

Congrats on yours, Linda.

Counting back from the 1011 you had when I came in again, I guess this must've been roughly your #1000.

Cheers
tom

linda_lakeside · Post by **linda_lakeside** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 7:10 am

Thanks, Tom. I wasn't really paying that much attention. I know it must've been close. Congrats again on your milestone.

Linda.

tom.d.stiller · Post by **tom.d.stiller** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 7:21 am

Sandra wrote:Congratulations for your 1000 post in the forum!!!!!! (it had to be a poem)

Thank you, Sandra. (it had to be one)

Cheers
tom

Andrew McGeever · Post by **Andrew McGeever** » Sat Mar 19, 2005 11:56 am

Dear Tom,
It's taken me long, but double congratulations are in order:

* Counterpoints is a mature, well-crafted piece of work. The effective use of contrasts, and efficient use of language combine to make a poem that works on a number of levels.
* Your 1000th post!

. Mind you, I doubt if your messages will ever attain Elizabethan proportions!!

All the way from Scotland (where wireless birds are heard),
Andrew.

LaurieAK · Post by **LaurieAK** » Mon Mar 21, 2005 3:59 am

tom~

CONGRATS~~!~~ on your 1000 (+) posts...

Aboot the poem...

I really like the title. It plays more than a ceremonial part.

I don't get a feeling of hopefulness in this one. It seems more like a state of waiting and reluctant acceptance. But mostly waiting. There is a sense of 'to be continued' looming here...Thanks for sharing

cheers,
L