Like a painting

[Sanverp]

Hey,

Sometimes I'm referring to my blog, because I try to put some poems on it. This next poem has the same structure as Like a bird.

I gave it a try, as English is not my mother language (so please correct me if I made mistakes). I hope you enjoy it.

A new poem created: http://sandblogging.wordpress.com/poems/


Kind regards,
Sanverp

[Cate]

I like it.
I sang it the first time (luckily everyone is still sleeping) to the tune of bird on the wire and it seemed to fit very well.

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In the poem "Kamikaze kisses"

You have send me some kisses
But they arrived in my eye

I think you want to say, 'you have sent me (some) kisses'

I love the title of this one - all of those harsh k's paired with the s's
I'd love to see you move away from Leonard tunes with this one and flush that really good opening without the constraints of the other song which almost seem to take over your poem. (just a thought)

[Sanverp]

Hey Cate,

Thanks for your reply... And thanks for the mistake you have found.
I have already corrected it on the site.


Kind regards,
Sanverp