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peter danielsen · Post by **peter danielsen** » Mon Dec 19, 2011 6:38 pm

Kneeling
by a small pond
my soul watches
the mirror of the galaxy
in the green film
where hope still balances
the beginning and ending of time
until some day
the pendulum of the heart becomes too heavy
and the fossil fuels of reason darken the sky of thought
and the water of death falls into the sea of nothing

peter danielsen · Post by **peter danielsen** » Tue Dec 20, 2011 2:42 am

"where hope still balance
the beginning and ending of time"

is this grammatically correct or should it be
"where hope still balances
the beginning and ending of time"

Peter

Cate · Post by **Cate** » Fri Dec 23, 2011 5:59 am

Hi Peter - grammar and I are not the best of friends but to my ear 'balances' sounds better.
I think because you are balancing two things.

peter danielsen · Post by **peter danielsen** » Fri Dec 23, 2011 10:48 pm

thanks cate changed it
Peter

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Sat Dec 24, 2011 4:42 am

Yes, Cate is right on.
It would either be that hopes balance...
or that hope balances.

Oh. And I like the poem. It has the deep murkiness befitting those thoughts.

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