I where my trousers well

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fishfishquaileye
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I where my trousers well

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the other day
I fell
down
a
well
and where
my trousers
who can say?
they pull me out
and children
shout
"ooh, Mister, your trousers are wet"
I kno wot u
thinking
my strides is stinking
but the wet
is well
water
not sick minde.
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Violet
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Re: I where my trousers well

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fishfishquaileye wrote:the other day
I fell
down
a
w
ell
and where
my trousers
who can say?
they p
ull me out
and children
shout
"ooh, Mister, your trou
sers are wet"
I kno wot u
think
ing
my strides is stinking
but the wet
is well
water
not sick minde.
.. sometimes words really aren't enough in this line of work. Thankfully, due to my well rounded Fine Arts background, I have other tactics I can resort to.

[I think this came out particularly well, actually] [strictly from a colorist's standpoint]

.. anyway, fish, as best as I can make out, your trousers are still at the bottom of that well, and so that leaves some room then to imagine what might in fact be wet in this particular scenario. That the children should mistake that for your trousers is disturbing to be sure, but I'm doubtful that means the reader is the one with the sick "minde" in this situation.

.. now, I don't like repeating myself--you know that about me, and yet, you bait me with material that surely needs the exact same reprimand, time and again:

get off the junk, fish.

.. okay, it's a lovely fallish day, and so I'm going on my bike ride,

Dr. V.D. Flowers [unoffishal substance abuse counselor]
Violet
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