The Boy Listening to "Break It Up"

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smccallon
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The Boy Listening to "Break It Up"

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The boy listening to “Break It Up”
Revelations fell like time moving fast
He woke into a stance
Fists fighting the air
Paradise was his new home
And this was heaven
To him

Could have floated on the smoggy L.A. air
A night not to be forgotten
When he designed his fate
As she broke down every wall he faced
With just one song
Yelling “I could feel”
He lost his voice
As she moved in spontaneous movement
This was no coincidence
He took a million seconds of life
Left time behind
Transfixes a smile gazing over all in just
Minutes

He escaped life for just moments
Stood on feet weightless
Like a revival he never felt
Just had to pound his chest
Seeing if he was still living
Because he went through change
And he knew life would not be this similar
Again

August 25, 2004
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Hi Sean ~

I always like the visual energy in your poems.

~ Lizzy
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