Serena's story -finished at last!

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democracy
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Serena's story -finished at last!

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Serena’s Story

Laughter chimes
Fate entwines
Two wandering souls
Sailing blind

I dreamt of you
Now we’re talking
Laughing and smiling
I’m struck dumb gawping

A Bologna bar
Launches my zeal
At 3am
Bow stern and keel

5 days pass
Shall we marry?
Unfurl the sail
Two children to carry
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Re: Serena's story

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I like this Democracy

When you spend time thinking of someone, and suddenly (so it seems) there you are, and there they are - right infront of you.

I like the ship theme, and I especially like your use of words in conjunction with this at the end.

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