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Juan Juanders

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Cate
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First the poem, my first impression ... it's brutal and there's a rawness to it that I really appreciate, I feel it in the words - the loss, the pain, the anger. I think that you have done an excellent job.

now as for the word cunt - opinion,
I think you should use it to full effect in it's full form
It’s a powerful word hard/harsh sometimes violent, sometimes empowering always raw – the very sound of it has a coarseness (I don't mean crude, I mean the actual sound of the phonemes) and I think you need all of the sounds for full effect.
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I think this is brilliant Juan, the subject strikes a chord with me, as does the style of writing that you have used.

I completely agree with Cate. 'Cunt' is a word full of meanings, it is one of those words that is powerful no matter what context you use it in, and so I think you should write it fully.
Some people are offended by it, I, personally speaking, am not.
Even those who may not like it - should certainly be able to tolerate it in the context of this wonderful piece.

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