A Little Piece of Poetry

yoav · Post by **yoav** » Sat Apr 03, 2004 8:11 pm

Every time I fall in love
I tranclate it into poetry.
After a while I realize
That it wasn't really love
And even more sadly -
That it wasn't really poetry.
This is just another proof
That I'm bad at writing songs
But good at telling the truth.

margaret · Post by **margaret** » Sat Apr 03, 2004 10:00 pm

Don't give up on either.

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 7:57 am

That's precious, Yoav.....and "good at telling the truth" can never be underestimated. Welcome to the Forum

.

~ Lizzytysh

Arno · Post by **Arno** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 11:34 am

very nice yoav,
welcome

although I may add that translate is spelled with an s as far as I know

no offence, just a petite correction

take care
Arno

Epurcelly · Post by **Epurcelly** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 12:05 pm

Hey Yoav-
I dug your poem. To me, there is no possible way that honest writing can be anything but beautiful poetry. Thank you and welcome to the swimming pool.

Arno- I don't know about the trends in Germany, but in N.J., it is all the rage to put a "c" in place of an "s" All the cool kids are smokin' cigs and switchin' the "s"

Pete · Post by **Pete** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 12:32 pm

I like the style of the poem... the realisation at the end.

Replacing s's with c's ?? How dare the kids in NJ tamper this way with the English language!! Language must evolve in a way that does not resort to just switching letters. Suppose we decided to switch b's with d's... where woulb the bestiny of our language leab us? I shubber to think.

I've said my bit. I could write more but I have to snuke this afternoon and must prepare myself accordingly.

Yours in good faith,
Pete

Harry Harpin · Post by **Harry Harpin** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 1:13 pm

I think if you were to check out my poem for Father's Day you would get more of an idea of advanced poetry and it might give you soemthing to aim for! Anyway, good try for a beginner. By the way, watch out for the really thick people here and also the rude ones who are agressive for no reasoning at all!

yoav · Post by **yoav** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 2:15 pm

Thanks for the warm welcome, and the spelling corrections.

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 2:41 pm

Pete ~

Did you know I'd be sitting, melting into my computer with laughter

, before I even got to snuke

? Great jod!

Love,
Lizzy

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 2:44 pm

Epurcelly ~

". . .and welcome to the swimming pool.

" ~ I like that

. And, despite what 'some' may say, the water's warm

.

~ Lizzy

Pete · Post by **Pete** » Sun Apr 04, 2004 5:56 pm

Elizabeth

I just knew

I couldn't resist. I have returned from my snuking. The weather was kind but the moors were bleak.

Pete