Graphite
the thin gray line smears
as i touch it
dragging my finger along
the curves
smudging them
into faint fat facts
nothing like their original
shapes
oppressed by the medium
fingerprinted
questioned
released
i begin again
a darker softer shade
applying more pressure
in aggressive strident
strokes
walking down the page
the journey taking shape
slowly
smudging again
as the blade of my hand
slices across it
leaving a distinct
urge
as if in anger
or despair
lost in the angle
of hand holding tightly
the slender sharpened tool
defining
fine intricate precise
words
holding to truths
nothing but truths
whole truths
smudged
into life
31 December 2009
Graphite
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vern.silver
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Graphite
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"Clarence said a striking thing about rowing that I've always valued ... that he liked rowing because you were approaching life backward. You could clearly see the past, and you glanced quickly at the future over your shoulder.' Jim Harrison.
Re: Graphite
Hello Vern,
There's is so much that I like here. Your words have indeed drawn an excellent picture for us, it's very tactile.
shapes
oppressed by the medium
fingerprinted
questioned
released
love it! very clever, I also like how you repeat that form later under with 'words'.
all the best,
cate
There's is so much that I like here. Your words have indeed drawn an excellent picture for us, it's very tactile.
shapes
oppressed by the medium
fingerprinted
questioned
released
love it! very clever, I also like how you repeat that form later under with 'words'.
all the best,
cate
Re: Graphite
Happy birthday, Vern!
Mary
Mary
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Thanks, Molly. I was coming here for the same thing, to wish Vern a Happy Birthday... our New Year's Baby! Very good of you to leave us such a lovely gift as your poem, Vern... a Hobbit Birthday 
. What else did you do or are you doing to celebrate?
Love,
Lizzy
. What else did you do or are you doing to celebrate?Love,
Lizzy
"Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken."
~ Oscar Wilde
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vern.silver
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Re: Graphite
I did not do too much on my birthday - I had to work. One of the women I work with surprised me with a birthday cake, and a nice, comfortable, friendly hug which did wonders for my soul.
Thanks for the wishes and the comments on my poems.
Vern
Thanks for the wishes and the comments on my poems.
Vern
"Clarence said a striking thing about rowing that I've always valued ... that he liked rowing because you were approaching life backward. You could clearly see the past, and you glanced quickly at the future over your shoulder.' Jim Harrison.
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Re: Graphite
Hi Vern,
I really enjoyed Graphite.
Your word groups - just a few per line - forced me to scroll down, as if following a crayoned line as it moves across a sheet of paper. Initially, I thought it was about creating a drawing, until the 'slender sharpened tool' line, and I realized then, that it was about writing, about that kind of artwork. The drawing reference fitted really well, for me.
I really enjoyed Graphite.
Your word groups - just a few per line - forced me to scroll down, as if following a crayoned line as it moves across a sheet of paper. Initially, I thought it was about creating a drawing, until the 'slender sharpened tool' line, and I realized then, that it was about writing, about that kind of artwork. The drawing reference fitted really well, for me.