the end.
Thank you.
Iambic thingie
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Iambic thingie
My latest Shakespearean-style iambic pentameter in blank verse....
the end.
Thank you.
the end.
Thank you.
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
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Excellent verse Byron!
You have managed to be both translucent and succinct.
You have managed to be both translucent and succinct.
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Thank you both. I was always taught to allow the reader the room to bring their own imagery to one's prose and poetic form.
I have endeavoured to give the reader the widest expanse possible wherein he/she can illuminate the essences of the piece I've presented to her/him.
Having watched the Turner Prize winners over so many years, I feel that at the very least I can hold my own in their esteemed company, if only as an 'umble jobbing wordsmith. ( rubbing hands together in a slimy and ingratiating sort of way )
I have endeavoured to give the reader the widest expanse possible wherein he/she can illuminate the essences of the piece I've presented to her/him.
Having watched the Turner Prize winners over so many years, I feel that at the very least I can hold my own in their esteemed company, if only as an 'umble jobbing wordsmith. ( rubbing hands together in a slimy and ingratiating sort of way )
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
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Byron!
This was mean - I was all ready for an example of a metered poem
YOU ARE VERY NAUGHTY - off to the corner with you
go on
This was mean - I was all ready for an example of a metered poem
YOU ARE VERY NAUGHTY - off to the corner with you
go on
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"Ooooh, whip me whip me, but don't hurt me." 
A very old clip from 'Round The Horn,' by Jules and Sandie.
A very old clip from 'Round The Horn,' by Jules and Sandie.
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
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whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
Time to move on? I may trade my mask and whip for a wimple and habit...
XO
Time to move on? I may trade my mask and whip for a wimple and habit...
XO
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whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch yelp
whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
Ladies and gentlemen I give you a joint presentation of our latest haiku.
ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch ouch yelp
whirrrrrr-SNAP! whirrrrr-snap!
Ladies and gentlemen I give you a joint presentation of our latest haiku.
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
Re: Iambic thingie
My favourite lines are the two in the very middle, Byron. Well done .
."Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken."
~ Oscar Wilde
~ Oscar Wilde
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Thank you Elizabeth. I struggled long, longer and hard, to discover the form of 'beat' and multilayered transcendence of those particular lines.
I am delighted that you have grasped that nettle, which is tremendously difficult, given the previous ascendence (spl ?) and the following lowering of tonal delivery of the two enveloping lines. Well spotted.
I am delighted that you have grasped that nettle, which is tremendously difficult, given the previous ascendence (spl ?) and the following lowering of tonal delivery of the two enveloping lines. Well spotted.
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
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Re: Iambic thingie
Byron mon, where I come from, that kind of talk is called 'speakey-spokey'Byron wrote:
I am delighted that you have grasped that nettle, which is tremendously difficult, given the previous ascendence (spl ?) and the following lowering of tonal delivery of the two enveloping lines. Well spotted.
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For speakey-spokey, I would say I'm intoxicated by the exuberance of my own verbosity. 
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
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Dunno - seems a little to verbose for me 