This Man's a Freud

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Strictly Confidential
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This Man's a Freud

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I put Sigmund Freud in a toothbrush mug
arms high, waving his knowledge and his confidence,
after all, only fools or niche psychoanalysts
dare to wear bow-ties.

In his right hand, probably a cigar
maybe a burnt pencil,
either way, ready to tap the ashes
of the burning relationship I bring him.

In that same bathroom accessory,
late at night,
husband sleeping,
wife returns,
anxious creeping
she gargles clean her consensual infidelity.

Now, here’s a strange one-
a month ago
she knew a ton of feathers weighed
as much as a ton of lead,
but that the burden of sharing
matched the burden of secrecy
was not within her head.

Her man-
now here’s a strange one
strong enough to be weak
a week enough to make him wonder
if his boast that monogamy was unnatural,
unlike beech or oak,
was really just a middle-class theory.

Anyway, she comes there
then she comes back,
then she comes again,
and he hasn’t a clue
if he is any happier now
than he ever was.

And that will be £100,
Sigmund says,
from one mug to another.
Last edited by Strictly Confidential on Mon Jan 05, 2004 10:56 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by lizzytysh »

I love this one, SC. Very cleverly done with some truisms.

"she knew a ton of feathers weighed
as much as a ton of lead,
but that the burden of sharing
matched the burden of secrecy
was not within her head."

Excellent!
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Post by Byron »

SC, you have hit upon the gilt of guilt. I enjoy re-reading this piece of yours. You do have a way with words and it is fun for you, yes?
"Bipolar is a roller-coaster ride without a seat belt. One day you're flying with the fireworks; for the next month you're being scraped off the trolley" I said that.
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Post by Ben Kelly »

SC

Glad to see you back writing, which should be the only agenda.

Great and enjoy your success

Kind regards

Ben
Life rewards action, just as well done is better than well said. Yours the Galactic Pixie
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Post by Strictly Confidential »

thank you Ben. I just made two edits each of which made me happy! in a week's time I will give it a serious review and see how I can improve it.
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Post by Strictly Confidential »

hi, I know this poem has not attracted a great deal of attention but I would love to add a photo of my Freud figure in his toothbrush mug. I cant get image option to work so far. help, please?
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Post by Ben Kelly »

Dear SC

Refer to Jarkko, he will help

Ben
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