Mouth full of love

[Aletheia]

with my mouth
full of love
and eyes full of tears
I had to tell you
that you no longer
was my lover

with the mouth
full of silence
and your eyes
full of anger
you slapped me
one time or two
until you fell down

but your fall
is deeper
than you ever
will see
that is why
my friend
that is why

[Lion of Lions]

det er et underligt digt, med nogle underlige ideer og grammatiske fejl

with my mouth
full of love
and eyes full of tears
I had to tell you

you should never talk with your mouth full

that you no longer
was my lover

were, not was

with the mouth

your mouth

full of silence
and your eyes
full of anger
you slapped me
one time or two
until you fell down

from the effort of just two slaps?

but your fall
is deeper
than you ever
will see

was there a hole in the ground?

that is why
my friend
that is why


that is why what exactly?

I really liked your expression "mouth full of silence"

welcome to the forum

Lion of LIons

[lizzytysh]

Hi Aletheia ~

but your fall
is deeper
than you ever
will see

that is why
my friend
that is why

Very effectively you speak of how you took your stand. Good on you. Welcome to the Forum .


~ Lizzy

[Aletheia]

Thank you Lizzie and Lion of lions for your comments. I will correct my spelling later.
Thanks!