My Parents

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Nice little poem, plus warm sentiments. :shock:
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Geoffrey wrote:Lion of Lions wrote:
>Geoffrey, I am mildly curious about your reasoning for trolling this particular thread. explain (or even repent) at your leisure.

you were embedded in thoughts about burial grounds, and the importance of having spirits lifted were you not? isn't it normal practice to get somebody away from sullenness by changing the subject? you tell me - or are you one of those people with paradox personalities who are never happier than when they are unhappy? i am in the middle of making rogan josh, so please don't disturb me again for a while because i am poor company when i'm hungry. comprende?

when you read this it is bound to be the appropriate length of "while", unless the words jump off your nintendo gameboy screen and punch you in your rogans whilst you are trying to cook (don't worry, that can't really happen, I was merely joshing you).

obvs. I appreciate your calculated misinterpretation of my meanings in the poem. well done!
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Rel Constant wrote:Nice little poem, plus warm sentiments. :shock:

thank you very much.
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Red Poppy wrote:
>Olympic swimming races are always won by coloured men or women.

"always"? only about a couple of times since adam and eve were evicted from their lovenest have coloured people won an olympic gold medal in swimming, i'd wager. damned good at running, though. but swimming? - nah. "always" remember, geoffrey is never wrong.
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Cate wrote:hello

I stand here – I think this is very effective, it gives me a quiet feeling. To me it spoke of the separation between child and dead parents as well as resilience.


added on

I wonder at the line character development ... I wonder if this speaks about the parents, perhaps they the type constantly trying to improve themselves or making suggestions for other people or does it speak about the narrator whose parents will not see the type of man and parent he became.

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Your parents died in pretty short span of one another, that must have been a very difficult year for your family
hey Cate xx

Character development" and "plot" was obviously a film/story play on words with burial. It was no more than a way of describing that it's the end of them (subject to afterlife etc.)

yes, the year was tough and my mum was a very strong character and I didn't expect her to follow the common pattern of going so soon after her partner. when she was diagnosed with cancer she told Kathy before she told me which may be revealing of her feelings about her "baby" (I'm the youngest of 3), or K's perceived strength. she said that she didn't think I would be able to take it well, I didn't really have a choice!
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Red Poppy wrote:Lion of Lions - might I suggest "lie" instead of "lay" in the last line of your poem - both grammatically and aesthetically it would seem more appropriate.
thanks, I think you are right. maybe my allergy to the easy and way overused word "lie" in its other sense stopped me realising that!
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Lion of Lions wrote:
>I appreciate your calculated misinterpretation of my meanings in the poem. well done!


the sarcastic line above does nothing but announce to one and all that as a child you lacked a good regular parental clout across the back of the head.
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[quote=I didn't expect her to follow the common pattern of going so soon after her partner. [/quote]


My parents ( I was not raised by them) were separated for almost forty years... never met again, but yet still died within 6 months of each other.

I often wondered about that, as you say, it must be some kind of universal pattern.

I liked your poems a lot but the second one struck more of a chord with me
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Geoffrey wrote:Lion of Lions wrote:
>I appreciate your calculated misinterpretation of my meanings in the poem. well done!


the sarcastic line above does nothing but announce to one and all that as a child you lacked a good regular parental clout across the back of the head.
"one and all" is just a fancier version of the more common use of "we" when a writer is scared to stand by his own view alone.
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btw, i still cannot figure out how to do that quote thingy properly here
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tinderella wrote:
I didn't expect her to follow the common pattern of going so soon after her partner. [/quote wrote:

My parents ( I was not raised by them) were separated for almost forty years... never met again, but yet still died within 6 months of each other.

I often wondered about that, as you say, it must be some kind of universal pattern.

I liked your poems a lot but the second one struck more of a chord with me
thanks about the poems.

yes, that pattern is really well established and I come across it regularly in bereavement work .
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tinderella wrote:btw, i still cannot figure out how to do that quote thingy properly here
it depends on what computer you use. It does not work for Macs but will work for any PC which cost over £500 unless purchased in Ireland.
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Geoffrey wrote:Lion of Lions wrote:
>I appreciate your calculated misinterpretation of my meanings in the poem. well done!


the sarcastic line above does nothing but announce to one and all that as a child you lacked a good regular parental clout across the back of the head.
actually, on mature reflection (so, I asked someone else obviously) I really do appreciate your calculated misinterpretations. The predictability of them is rather warm and cuddly.

I guess the game for you was to wait for me to explain that as I get a lift from my visits, which leave me in a mood 583 miles from sullen, I would not welcome the distraction. The spirits lift with the visit so I don't want any of your silly change of subjects, ta. However, I am not going to tell you any of this so your troll didn't work. Bad luck.

How was the Rogenthingy? Was it called Ronald?
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Lol... my first laugh of the evening from LOL..... no wonder you chose that name ...how appropriate.
I see we did not get a lot of replies to the 'Fave songs to accompany Luvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvve to' huh?
Are we the only lovers on here lol
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tinderella wrote: Are we the only lovers on here lol
yes, and that was only for one night. but you were very good and I will never forget it, so thanks again xx
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