Me loving her

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Wed Sep 17, 2003 7:22 pm

I like your tribute to this woman, Ronnie. Some of your phrasing also seems Leonard-inspired.

Ronnie · Post by **Ronnie** » Wed Sep 17, 2003 10:34 pm

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Thu Sep 18, 2003 6:05 am

Well, I wasn't thinking plagiaristic, Ronnie. Simply that his words and phrasings work their way into our thoughts and the words that emerge from them later. It's a natural process, and very complimentary to Leonard.

Ronnie · Post by **Ronnie** » Thu Sep 18, 2003 12:25 pm

George.Wright · Post by **George.Wright** » Thu Sep 18, 2003 2:23 pm

That's no bad thing, Ronnie.
Georges

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Fri Sep 19, 2003 2:12 pm

"Too much"/"too long" ? How can this be

? Not from where I sit

. It seems Leonard also commented on how things are taken in and re-emerge in similar form later. You know that old saying, "There's nothing new on earth"? Well, there ya go ~

Makera · Post by **Makera** » Tue Sep 30, 2003 7:36 am

Hi Ronnie~

This is truly beautiful! A little paraphrased derivation does not detract from
the honesty of your heart. (Apart from a Cohenesque phrase or two, there are some a little reminiscent of Sting, also). And why not; great poets of the heart always have an influence on those who love.

One small suggestion, re: the penultimate line, 2nd stanza; could use a small word (like 'then', for instance) to harmonize the rhythm.
(Penultimate is '2nd last', so no-one is confused).

I really love this poem, Ronnie.

~Makera

Me loving her

Me loving her

Me Loving Her