Prose-poem: Man on the Rec Way.

[Manna]

I'm trying to write something now, and noticing that a lot of editing is happening on the fly.

[Marisha]

I'm trying to write something now, and noticing that a lot of editing is happening on the fly.

I used to be a fly
on an innocent man's trousers
then they
edited away
my head
so I can't give it
then
my wings
now I bring no
pleasure
to anyone
except a dumb
poet
who doesn't know
I live for
a day
and have
no time
to have
"a lot of editing on the fly"


Marisha

this was just for fun and was not a protest poem at all!!!

[Alan Alda]

I've tried editing on flies before but found that cockroaches work better........

[Marisha]

I've tried editing on flies before but found that cockroaches work better........

behind many a fly
lie
a cock
(although it could be a stuffed sock)

[Manna]

ooooh, the "lie" and the stuffed sock - I love it.

[Casey Butler]

My job is flooding!

It's more pure if the original artist does their own editing, of course; yet, input from others doesn't corrupt the process or validity of the work.

I'm supposing that since you haven't come in fresh for a long time, maybe you don't see the poetry from the point of view of someone new who is untrained by "input from others" here. Internet forums are all like this I've found - at least the ones I've visited. It's a part of that special type of "evolution" humanity is actually part of.

And since the shepherd here claims to edit his poems for years and decades, it would be heresy to consider any other ideas. I'm guilty of heresy everywhere.

But... Didn't we read what he wrote? "Caveat Emptor". "I want to do something big..."... etc. Sheep in wolves' clothing we weren't warned about. Darn!

Casey