Bathtime fun

[Cate]

revision 2 - may 12

Body penetrates
water crashes
Rollll ... onto belly
sliide . across bottom
rest body
warmth penetrates


revision 1 - may 12

Body penetrates surface
Water crashes angrily to sides
Roll onto belly
Slide across porcelain bottom
Body comes to rest
Feet lay crossed on tile
Fingers brush porcelains top
Hair and soft parts float
Warmth penetrates skin and muscle


Original, original - meant as spoken word

Water ........ smooth ........ calm .........still
Toe ...... foot ...... body ........ penetrates
Waves ... ripple .. roll .mount crash
body ......... porcelain ......... smooth ........ s
tap........toe........water.......spout..................l
legs.........tile.........fingers......link ..................i
cascade.........thighs.........shutter......................d
un dul a tions......................................................e
.... calm
Flip .-... belly .. porcelain .. smooth .. ...................................................
Hair .. face .. bottom .. legs ...... float..........
Mouth .... nose .... bubbles .......
....... still ...... water ...... br eaks
warmth .... penetrates .. skin ...... muscles......re
body ...... smooth ...... calm ...... still .................la
..............................................................................x

Original posted
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Water

Water ........ smooth ........ calm .........still
Toe ..... foot ..... body ....... penetrates
Waves .. ripple . roll .mount crash
Flip ..-.... belly .... porcelain .... smooth .. sl
Un dul a tions . ............................................i
.... calm .........................................................d
Hair ... face .... bottom .... legs ....... float..........e
Mouth .... nose .... bubbles .......
....... still ...... water ...... br eaks
warmth ...... penetrates ...... skin ....... muscles......re
body ...... smooth ...... calm ........ still ......................la
.....................................................................................x


Edited so many times due to pressing submit instead of preview while playing with bubbles and spaces. Also due to boredom which had me playing with bubbles and spaces instead of doing something productive.

[lizzytysh]

Interesting form with the slide and relax being formed at the end rather than down the left margin. There's some way to hold the space, but I can't remember what it is... maybe font colour?


~ Lizzy