inventory

tom.d.stiller · Post by **tom.d.stiller** » Mon Jun 16, 2003 10:50 am

inventory

objects / subjects / lost and found
tarnished by abuse

stray cats / straw mats / thrown away
birds with broken wings

weak words / old hurts / days and nights
covered up with pain

lost souls / loopholes / gaps and shells
skulls that keep a smile

a veteran made from the splinter
that lamed his leg an opener
he used for love letters
only

objects / subjects / lost and found
miracles of life

lizzytysh · Post by **lizzytysh** » Mon Jun 16, 2003 3:15 pm

Tom ~

Thank you for this beautiful poem, the rightful sentiments it expresses, and the innovative glimpse and wonder of the soldier.

~ Elizabeth

Iubita · Post by **Iubita** » Tue Jun 17, 2003 3:48 am

Tom,
I love this poem...very nice words that reminding me a lot of feelings...I think, we are on the same wave...
thank you, Tom

Iubita

Byron · Post by **Byron** » Thu Jun 19, 2003 1:01 am

tom. The poem had me puzzled for some time. I couldn't put my finger on it until now. It was staring me in the face.
The use of the 'forward slash' carries the poem onward. It also counterbalances the backward glances into the past life of the voice. As a pictorial reference, it works on a third level by emphasising the drag of all those 'things' which hold the voice back as the words and life have to continue on their journey, which is achieved by leaning forwards to take on the storms of life, which the voice is straining to accomodate. We all drag our old baggage around with us as we strive to make our way. The forward slashes also show how to slice away the pain we have already been through, without forgetting what has gone before. We also compartmentalise our lives and this is also shown to stunning effect. I really enjoy a piece of work which acts on many levels like this one. Many thanks to you tom.
Byron 'sends his regards'.