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Hi SlightlyD, this is a lovely piece of work, like the Virgin herself!

Eid is in reference to Eid ul-fitr, the breaking of the feast?

I am pacified everytime I think about your poem, makes personal criticisms very difficult, one thing I'd say would be to keep the last line unbroken, but thats not my decision and you made that decision for your purpose.

To comprehend the sharp significance of meaning,
a new perspective- depending on your leaning,

- personally I think this work deserves a little more working on those lines, but then it works with "I suppose", I suppose, so...

Such a peaceful work with such undercurrents, a very contemporary and beautiful work indeed. Thanks for sharing, and if I actually come up with a criticism worth a damn I will let you know!
James.

James,
I very much appreciate your swiftly returned comments....and lack of personal criticism The poem is in reference to Eid ul-fitr that is correct. ~allow me to explain, in my college there is a large proportion to Malaysian students and on that feast day, the Malaysian women dressed in their traditional silk dresses. I admired them very much on that day in their beauty, that is hidden for much of the time. But at the same time, it is an unpersuable beauty...given the nature of their unbringing and cultural values.
Perhaps I am wishing without real hope for a 'breaking the fast' of a more carnal kind
Karl