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Poem E:


Can I come back home??
(This can also be sung to the tune of: "The Picture" by Kid Rock)

Livin' my life is a slow Hell
I saw you take that blonde bitch to that hotel
I yell across the street that she's a whore
I want to stab her in the head 3 damn timesssss

Been livin' off take-aways chips and gravy
that bitch should never have dissed meee
oh God will I ever change my ways??

I ran from the cops today
escaped down an allyway
I can't get to see you, while the cops are after meeee

I hid the knife today
thru my ID away
I can't get to see you, while the cops are after meeee

I called you last night at the Blue Bell
if the cops ask about me ~ then don't tell
you'd better not be sleeping with that
ugly fat blonde bitch fron Hell ~ and another thing she's got gonorrhea

I've been cheatin' on you for a long time
givin' out blow jobs while drunk on cheap wine
an' I aint heard from you in 3 damn nights

The cops put out my picture today
said I escaped down an alleywaaay
An' I can't look at you while I'm sleeping with Sgt. Jim

I swear I'll change my waaaays
I'm just writing to say ~ I love you

Can I come back home??

Hi~

I wasn't ambitious enough to check out Kid Rock's piece, so I only read this as a poem, not a poem/song.

Enjoyed this very much. It's got great "bad attitude." Love grows in the even the hardest of souls...

Thanks,
Laurie

Is that S&Gs alleyway he slipped down? Good poem from a very angry and anxious person's POV. You really pulled this off well. SOmetimes we forget that poetry can deal with harsh subjects too but this is an impressive reminder of that.

now this writer would enjoy, and can benefit from , a good look at Tom Waits' lyrics. Alleyway poetry, a very good idea as most of us were slushy!