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The time has come
to leave,
there are only some
hours left.

the time has passed
like the sound of the wind
before the rain;
like my steps
on the stones
I walked
to get to you.

I do not know
what you want,
I never knew,

But I know
how important it is
to tell
or just to feel
someone listens,
just like an echo
of you


I do not mind
about
the pain
you gave to me,
the mean words
you said to me

forgive me
because
I had no speech
when you talked to God,
but I understand
when after that,
you cursed and opposed.

Mi silence and your arrogance
will some day talk.

My silence and your arrogance
will some day talk

That sounds like an optimistic ending. I love those two lines, Sandra.

Diane

Stones.

Because stones are unyielding
Because stones build walls
Because stones are deaf

thanks Diane.

oh....Fljotsdale, I was going to put it

My steps on the stones

Great minds...

Hi Sandra,

This is a fine poem. It reads well, it is smooth.

It also reminds me quite eerily of an experience I had with a girl some years ago!

Thanks

Boss

oh......thanks Boss. this poem indeed is about a teacher/student relationship. I have some students that are in social risk and their lives are quite difficult. To relate with them is a task that does not show inmediate consequences...my hope is that in the future they will still remember some of this intentions -
But the idea itself may relate to other experiences as well...

IIIIIII don't know.

I was thinking "Crossroads" ~ maybe "Stoney Crossroads" or, with Snow's Spelling Primer, that might be "Stony Crossroads" .

Probably what you've already chosen is best, though....since the title is supposed[?] to have at least one of the words from the poem in it?

I hope your students can benefit from it, too, Sandra. I like it.

~ Lizzy

oh......lizzytysh, this is funny, I put the title Crossroads in other forum I put this poem... but I was not quite happy with that title......
thanks,
S

Well, I guess I'll make a similar, one-off claim, then ~ Great Minds Dissatisfied... ~ I wasn't really satisfied with it, either [as you can see]. Seemed too generic and pedestrian, somehow . Well, at least we agree on that .

Very ironic. In fact.

< * maybe that's where I got it from ~ I've been working on those powers lately, you know * >


~ Lizzy

I like sometimes to put my poems in the wild.....this one in 4 forums and I only got answers in two of them so far..... so I can get a more balanced idea of the impact....

Ahhhh......very good idea, Sandra. Balance.

How was it received on the other forum where you received responses?

~ Lizzy

someone said that he´d called it
"this watch is broken"......and I think it is very original.

Yes, it is original, Sandra. Are you still awaiting other possibilities before you officially name it?

I am not sure but I like this one very much.....