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Do I wait for death to call me?
Or do I call out my own name?
Do I wait for death to take me?
Or do I let death take the blame?

Will death be my release?
Or do I release death from me?
Am I afraid of death?
Is death afraid of me?

Does death get to chose?
Or do I chose my death?

Someday will death call me?
Will I be afraid of death?
Will my friends surround me?
Or will I surround them?
Will my friends bury me?
Or will I bury them?

Are they afraid of death?
Or are they afraid of me?

I sort of like that. I think it a pity that you dropped the question format for one stanza, though.

Not that I should criticise! My stuff is not at all profound, lol!

very nice
my friend was telling me about this description by joyce i think, of a man who has lived well.. it goes something like " i wait for death like a man guarding a safe that has allready been ransacked"

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Great quote, Elazar.

I also can really appreciate death's being viewed from all of these perspectives, Phil. I like your poem.

~ Lizzy

I have edited the poem a little i think it reads better now

Fljotsdale wrote:I sort of like that. I think it a pity that you dropped the question format for one stanza, though.

Not that I should criticise! My stuff is not at all profound, lol!

i've changed the poem around after your comments. thanks it reads better now

Yes it does.

But you need to take the extra 'will' out of this line.

'Someday will death will call me? '

Fljotsdale wrote:Yes it does.

But you need to take the extra 'will' out of this line.

'Someday will death will call me? '

Thankyou

No worries, dear. It's a good poem.