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secret passion
sleep tight good night
the thousand things i didn't
have to tell you
i've got ten minutes
take five
that's all that's needed
for a lifetime


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neat but needs more!

This could have benefitted from a title.

The use of numbers to get a point across worked well. I think the drama could have been enhanced if the narrator gave more than 'half' of their ten minutes. The final two lines are very poignant and hint at a much bigger picture.

Nice.

regards,
Laurie

Interesting-this blending of the familiar (the things that I don't have to tell you) with the secret passion. It makes me wonder about the relationship. The last lines somehow brought to mind The Beatles, "All you need is love."

Joe