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Poem #8
Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2005 3:05 am
by Joe Way
Winter Again
What! Winter Again?
It seems only a Year
Ago when we had Snow
Shovels!
Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2005 5:02 am
by Joe Way
I really like short unambition poems that have a careful clarity to them.
I found this one to have a couple of nice enjambments. With a little more work, it could reach toward some Ogden Nash heights.
Joe
Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2005 11:00 am
by Critic2
I like it all bar the "Shovels", nice idea, nicely done. slightly prefer "pain", it makes a different point but the rhyme with "again" works (I think)
What! Winter Again?
It seems only a Year
Ago when we had Snow
Pain!
Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2005 4:40 pm
by paints
Pain? Snow Pain?
Oh dear. There is no time to spare. I suggest we move right to our lessons. No more chit chat.
Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2005 4:43 pm
by lizzytysh
You're right, that that's an interesting little twist, C2 ~ anyone who's ever shoveled snow can relate. You ask why I live in Florida?
As the poem stands, I love its humour regarding time and the seasons. Great little ditty.