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Dance me to end of the ballroom

Posted: Thu Aug 02, 2012 11:09 pm
by peter danielsen
The world is seated along the walls in the ballroom
while the poet dances alone
caught in the cone of light of a mad G_D

Re: Dance me to end of the ballroom

Posted: Thu Aug 23, 2012 2:31 pm
by Byron
peter, try it without 'round.' ;-)


Just a thought. ;-)

Re: Dance me to end of the ballroom

Posted: Thu Aug 23, 2012 7:16 pm
by peter danielsen
Thanks for your replies Byron, got rid of the round, much better

Re: Dance me to end of the ballroom

Posted: Thu Aug 23, 2012 7:24 pm
by Byron
It is always difficult to decide whether or not to 'hint' at a possible change. I've read loads of your work and felt comfortable that my 'hint' wouldn't be construed as anything but meant in the best of thoughts. :)