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The Night Before The Last

Posted: Mon Nov 29, 2004 7:50 am
by Atom Heart
If you are waiting
for things to change
I suggest
you stand by the sea
and count the teaspoons
you will drink
before the bottom is revealed.
And if someway
you do shrug
and find yourself unsatisfied
take a walk through this city.

Posted: Wed Dec 01, 2004 12:14 pm
by Critic2
Hi Atom Heart, this has potential. It feels very much like an early draft but I like the image of the hopeless measuring of the sea before a shrug and then a return to the, presumably, crowded city.