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this is for midnight, who thinks my poetry is too "banal." this is also probably one of the most insulting, offensive song i've ever put my dirty mind to paper. so bring on the hate.

SPIRITUAL MILK FOR AMERICAN BABES

Molech, the Priest, held a sermon in Golgotha
where he preached the second coming of rock and roll
I shouted, "Eli, Eli, Eli, lama lama sabachthani!"
and there rose the devil from his fiery hole

"I am the manifestation of the Nation Void of Counsel
and I bringeth to you my religious arousal
I'm the hottest shit on the block
your sugar-tits for my twelve inch cock
I binge on salvation and purge on damnation
The Lord as my witness, I'm fit for temptation
So wrap your brimstone burns with your patriotic gauze
Christ Jesus, you've been killed for an unworthy cause."

I'm a sinner (sinner)
and proud of what you made me
I'm a sinner (sinner)
and nothing's gonna change me
And if you think (for one second)
that God is gonna save me
then resurrect me from the grave
where he hath laid me

God does not want His Truth to be known
and He forbids you to eat of the Tree
Well I'm fucking hungry, and You cannot stop me
I know that knowledge has been put there for me

I'm an alien from the commonwealth of hell
The Redeemer fed the Serpent's head after Adam fell
So stay, obey, and pray, or else the Lord will cum with fire
And God will laugh and mock your pain as solely His desire
So all ye that labor and are heavy laden, let Him give you Rest
And join my squad for our loving God and attempt to pass the Test
Let he fool return to folly, let the dog eat up its vomit
Let the motherfuckers congregate, and then we're gonna bomb it

I'm a sinner...

(In Adam's fall
we sinned all.)
I in the Burying Place may see
Graves shorter there than I;
From Death's Arrest no Age is Free,
Young Children too may die;
My God, may such an awful Sight.
Awakening be to me!
Oh! that by early Grace I might
For Death prepared be.

They call me Nine Eleven
I'm a 747
Just gimme 60 seconds and you're on your way to Heaven
They all knew it was true
But there ain't nothing we could do
except purchase some patriotism in our red, white, and blue
red stands for bloodshed
white stands for fear
blue stands for the sky where your ashes disappear
Ain't much else to say
except the death count today
God bless the mothafuckin' U.S. of A.

I'm a sinner...
And if you think
that God is gonna save me
then you're sorely mistaken, babe
and you must be fucking crazy

To you White Anglo-Saxon Puritans
All your mothers are Calvinists at heart
With your state-sponsored terrorism and your inoculated politics
I doubt your divinity and denounce your Art

I'm a sinner...

Terat,

I hope this was not an attempt to shock me. I come from very mean streets and have heard and seen it all. Your trivilization of the Cross and your anti-God rant was blasphemous but it was also silly and very, very banal.

it wasn't an attempt to shock you. it was an attempt to show you a different style than the previous one. don't give yourself so much credit.

and this was partially meant to be silly. like i said, you've got the tongue, but you're missing the cheek.

this is also probably one of the most insulting, offensive song i've ever put my dirty mind to paper. so bring on the hate.

it wasn't an attempt to shock you. it was an attempt to show you a different style than the previous one.

Terat,

Your whole purpose in offering this song to me was in hopes of getting a prissed-out reaction. So sorry to disappoint you.

P.S. There is no improvement in style.

shit, man. i thought you'd have at least gotten a laugh out of it or something.

but, i guess you are right. i am just a poor, worthless soul doomed to walk the hall's of your harsh eternal judgments. i bow before you and pray for your forgiveness, for i have soiled the holy verse with my heretical mind.

you know what? i somehow like this poem. it shows exactly the feeling of such a lot of people. my younger brother holds similar opinions. and it's so sad, but it's reality. not everybody lives in a barbie-doll-world, and those who do, mostly do it on the cost of others. but that poem might also show the exact point where you can get the people, where you have to start.
hope you also know other feelings, teratogen, and don't have to live all your life in that surroundings. sorry, never read many of your poems.

HAHAHAHAHA.

let me make something clear for everyone else who might read this selection of mine:

this is a song of mine i composed. for this compilation of songs i put on my cd i went for a few specific themes. one of them was to be as lewd, rude, and obnoxious as i could be, putting in some of my beliefs, as always, but making the extra effort to go over the top. this is a fantastic description here. in the first verse, molech, the canaanite god of fire, is preaching the second coming of rock and roll upon the mound where jesus was crucified and satan comes up from hell. it's a bit humorous, and i went for that as well. rock and roll has historically been associated with devil worship in the eyes of religious fanatics. and i think that's hilarious. so, as if to say the second coming of rock and roll is going to occur, who better to show up than satan? and the whole second verse is satan speaking to the audience. i admit, it's a pot-shot to all the hardcore christians out there, but it's also somewhat of a joke and i never wrote this with any intention of complete seriousness. i think it's strange that a few of you think otherwise. some words and phrases i took directly from the bible itself, and the breakdown that begins, "i in the burying place may see" was taken from the new england primer, which was actually a little song they tought to children. that's pretty fucked up i think. telling kids that they're gonna die. and the second breakdown about 9/11 i threw in there to really piss people off and to push the envelope further than it needed to go.

i hope this may clear a few things up for some people.

by the way, annaedith, i honestly don't think that my song shows how others think. everyone else i've talked to who feel remotely the way i do have simpler ideas. i try to read a lot and listen and watch and get involved somewhat. i don't know one person who would look at my song and recognize any phrases from the bible, i don't know anyone who knows who molech is, i don't know anyone who knows the phrase, "eli, eli lama sabachthani," i don't know anyone who knows what a calvinist is... most of the people i talk to who seem to share my ideas do not seem all that knowledgeable on certain levels. this only spoke for me when i wrote it. and it still does. and it will until someone else tells me they feel the exact same way, and GETS the song as the way it was intended to be.

you're right, alot of the things you have in that song are just unknown, also to me whose mother language is not English, though i will try to find out same of it. but i only read the poem like it is, and it seemed to create an atmosphere of despire, hate, fear, brutality and noise. and that is the world a lotof people are living in.i see that you only visited this world by your imagination, but looking around, reading and talking i realize that a lot of people really live there and cannot get out. and then they turn to violence, drugs and exremism.

Teratogen, speaking as one who works in state schools in Aust. I think I may confidently assert that the bulk of young adults from this current generation are poorly educated, uninformed of cultural history and overinformed with crap. Though I am a music teacher I do a lot of relief teaching in all areas of study and see that education and its relevance have gone round the S bend in comparison to my experience from the 60's and 70's. The state system sux and most students don't give a .... Tell your associates if they want an education then go to the library and follow their inclinations to get their own. Forget the piece of paper (degrees) it tends to be meaningless.
I don't agree with everthing you write (or its manner) but I like the main thrust of your work and where you seem to be coming from. If some of the writing appears to be banal- so what? There is a striving for meaning here and I see a skilled writer in the making. (and I am not implying that you are not a good writer already) Your writing holds my interest. I guess that makes me banal.
Keep on writing
Cheers, Witty Owl.

thank you so much, witty_owl.

i agree superfluously with you about the education system. i myself, as a student, believe that there is an unbelievable wealth of knowledge waiting for anyone to grab onto it. i have always enjoyed learning, and i enjoyed school for the purpose of that. not so much the teenage social lifestyles of being in school though. haha. i was never good at that. i only work in retail, and i work with some high school kids and obviously my management are older men and women, middle-aged or so, but none really have any educational background. but i do try to have intelligent conversations with some of them to no avail. i shouldn't expect too much (not to say i am smarter than them or anything), but i get a lot of confusion, lack of knowledge, and other responses that lead me to believe that none of them know a damn thing. even when i was in high school i couldn't talk to anyone seriously in my own age group save a few people who shared similar interests. that is the case today. i have few friends, but they are very close friends. what i see in my siblings and from the kids that come into my store or the kids i see on the bus or anywhere else for that matter is that they just really don't seem to give a shit about learning anything. maybe i'm not looking hard enough, or maybe they just don't show it. one thing i greatly disliked about high school was the whole informality of it. when teachers teach 4 or 5 classes with 30-something students in each class, what the hell do they care about you personally? the education system is something i have never gotten behind the scenes of, but i think it's very apparent that much is lacking. it's in the system and it's even in the kids. at young ages kids are sponges that have a tremendous ability to soak up information, but i see such apathy in a lot of kids and it's hard for me to understand. i can only make assumptions, but that's about it. i have come to the conclusion that being born in '84 puts me at the end of a generation born in the first half of the '80s. anyone born in the latter half of the '80s seems to be from a different generation. there's a strange gap between the two. and the concept of degrees is something i've complained about as well. all it is is a piece of paper with credentials that say "i can do this particular thing well." i am a musician and i want to further my musicianship as a career, and in school i never saw that happening. i can't get a piece of paper with credentials to tell record labels that i make good music or whatever. it doesn't apply to me. sometimes when i want to learn things for myself, i DO go to the library. in high school i found myself there quite a bit, and i still do now. between classes i go to the library. but most of the time i read an assigned reading or am writing poetry. but anyway...

as for your "skilled writer" comment, i must say that every one of my english teachers or professors, or in any class where i had to write an essay of some sort, they ALL said i wrote so well and above the level of the class. i got A's and B's on all those kinds of assignments, and i save all my A papers. there's a stack of them on my bookshelf. i've tried not to lead myself to believe that i'm god's gift to prosody and literature, but all my teachers enjoy what i write. my parents don't understand where i get that skill, but i believe english and music are the two biggest (if not the only two!) subjects that i do exceedingly well in.

in later posts i will try to pick something different from the subjects i have written about here. haha. it seems the whole anti-christian thing isn't going over so well. hahaha. i posted a poem i wrote a few years ago called "polymorphus perverse" while in a human sexuality class. i thought that was different enough. haha. nobody has replied to it yet though, so i dunno if anyone likes it. but anyway... thanks again for the comments. i look forward to more controversy over my material. hahahaha.