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I need a shave

Posted: Sun Sep 26, 2010 1:17 am
by peter danielsen
These days
when I shave
I try not to look at the entire face
40 years old
I have become so ugly
only small portions
of my skin is
bearable

but still the eyes
search for the eyes
And when I notice
the sorrow
I realize
what I could have
been
many years before
madness
found me
alone

Re: I need a shave

Posted: Sat Nov 20, 2010 2:08 pm
by mat james
I like the essence of your poem Pete; ....but.....
It can't be all that bad Peter. Come on. Tell me the good that you see. :)

Mat.

Re: I need a shave

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 1:17 am
by Horse of Babylon
peter danielsen wrote:These days
when I shave
I try not to look at the entire face
40 years old
I have become so ugly
only small portions
of my skin is
bearable

but still the eyes
search for the eyes
And when I notice
the sorrow
I realize
what I could have
been
many years before
madness
found me
alone
Hello. this is a very sad poem and yet I feel an aura of redemption as well. if you had given up then you would not even trouble to search any more. I feel there is hope and I wish you all the best

Sharon